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The speakers discuss two possible solutions to the woman’s problem. Briefly summarize the problem, then state which solution you recommend and explain why. v.2

The speakers discuss two possible solutions to the woman’s problem. Briefly summarize the problem, then state which solution you recommend and explain why. v. 2
One key part of the modern business today is advertising. Advertising is a very effective tool that influences economy all over the globe. In most cases, the more powerful the commercial ads are, the widely known the establishment is, consequently, the company reaps more profits. In fact, advertising has many advantages not only for companies, but also for customers. Traders or manufacturers find it crucial to announce customers about their products and services, and it is easy to achieve by placing some ads in front of their probable clients. For instance, if a company sells books, it will need to add an advertisement with their address and contact details in places close to schools and universities to inform students about their products. Furthermore, consumers who search for services or products will find it comforting to know about their needs easily and became able to make better choices. For example, many cell phone users take their decision regarding a specific device according to the components and the price of the phone which are stated clearly in the adds. Moreover, advertising itself is a creative industry that employs many people and supports the national economy of any country. On the other hand, advertising has a lot of drawbacks which must be taken into consideration. Firstly, advertising manipulates people and persuade them that buying certain products will make them happier. To illustrate, it deceives them only to push them towards buying even if they will not get the stated benefit. Secondly, the great number of advertisments leads the society to be a consuming society more than being a producing one. For instance, they alter people's mind towards following the latest trend and consume certain brands with high prices. Lastly, some advertisments influence children who put pressure on their parents to buy them things. This pressure is being out of parents' hands. In conclusion, advertisments are useful and necessary to push the industry and trade in the country forward. Adds has a lot of pros as well as cons as like as any other thing or facility that has not only positives but also negatives. The use of advertisments may be in the right or wrong way, according to the user and how he uses them.
One key part of the modern business
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today
is advertising. Advertising is a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
effective tool that influences economy all over the globe.
In most cases
, the more powerful the commercial ads are, the
widely
known the establishment is,
consequently
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
reaps more profits.

In fact, advertising has
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many
advantages not
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only
for
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companies
,
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but
also
for customers. Traders or manufacturers find it crucial to announce customers about their
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products
and services, and it is easy to achieve by placing
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
ads in front of their probable clients.
For instance
, if a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
sells books, it will need to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
add
an advertisement with their address and contact
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
in places close to schools and universities to inform students about their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
.
Furthermore
, consumers who search for services or
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
will find it comforting to know about their needs
easily
and became able to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
better choices.
For example
,
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many
cell phone users take their decision regarding a specific device according to the components and the price of the phone which
are stated
clearly
in the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
adds
.
Moreover
, advertising itself is a creative industry that employs
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many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
and supports the national economy of any country.

On the other hand
, advertising has
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a lot of
drawbacks which
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must
be taken
into consideration.
Firstly
, advertising manipulates
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
and persuade them that buying certain
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
them happier. To illustrate, it deceives them
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
to push them towards buying even if they will not
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get
the stated benefit.
Secondly
, the great number of
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advertisments
leads the society to be a consuming society more than being a producing one.
For instance
, they alter
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
's mind towards following the latest trend and consume certain brands with high prices.
Lastly
,
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some
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advertisments
influence children who put pressure on their parents to
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buy
them things. This pressure is being out of parents' hands.

In conclusion
,
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advertisments
are useful and necessary to push the industry and trade in the country forward.
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Adds has
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a lot of
pros
as well
as cons as like as any other thing or facility that has not
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only
positives
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but
also
negatives. The
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use
of
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advertisments
may be in the right or
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wrong
way, according to the user and how he
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
uses
them.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay The speakers discuss two possible solutions to the woman’s problem. Briefly summarize the problem, then state which solution you recommend and explain why. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
372 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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