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Some people think the secondary school should study non-academic subjects such as Civic or Religious Studies. Others argue that this a waste of time and those children should only study academic subjects like mathematics and science. v.1

Some people think the secondary school should study non-academic subjects such as Civic or Religious Studies. Others argue that this a waste of time and those children should only study academic subjects like mathematics and science. v. 1
It is often argued that tests measure a student's academic performance way more accurate than class projects and assignments do. Personally, I agree with this statement as I believe that exams do a better job in assessing course performance than projects. Firstly, exams are done under pressure which makes it a valuable performance measurement metric. In other words, students are closely monitored and are asked to answer questions within a specific time. This means that students should prepare for the exam beforehand and should be to ready to tackle any type of questions from specified topics. For example, personally, I would put more hard work and effort for a course that has examinations as a criteria to pass the course than I would do for a course that has class projects as a criteria to pass. This is why, I believe that all institutions should make it mandatory for learners to go through tests instead of projects as a way to measure their academic performance. Secondly, in my opinion, while projects and assignments are necessary for learners, I do not think that they are a valuable metric to measure course performance. To be more specific, assignments and projects require work to be done out of class sessions such as researching online. In addition, most students tend to get help from seniors who had already taken the course or get involved in other kinds of plagiarism activities. One of my friends for example, passed his class by having his final senior project done by one of his uncles. At the end of the course, my friend jokingly said that he had managed to pass the course knowing nothing about the content of the course. This is why I think that examinations should be included in a course syllabus as projects alone will not be a valuable tool to measure students' performance. In conclusion, I firmly believe that tests should be a part of a subject syllabus. Firstly, exams are timed and should be done under pressure not knowing anything about the questions, which I think serves as a better tool for assessing course performance. And secondly, unlike exams, projects are done outside of the classroom and this can lead to plagiarism.
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closely
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,
personally
, I would put more
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hard
work and effort for a
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course
that has examinations as
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a criteria
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course
than I would do for a
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course
that has
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class
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as
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their academic performance.

Secondly
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and assignments are necessary for learners, I do not
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that they are a valuable metric to
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measure
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course
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performance
. To be more specific, assignments and
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projects
require work to
be done
out of
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class
sessions such as researching online.
In addition
, most students tend to
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get
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help
from seniors who had already taken the
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course
or
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get
involved in other kinds of plagiarism activities. One of my friends
for example
, passed his
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class
by having his final senior
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project
done by one of his uncles. At the
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end
of the
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course
, my friend
jokingly
said that he had managed to pass the
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course
knowing nothing about the content of the
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course
. This is why I
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think
that examinations should
be included
in a
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course
syllabus as
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projects
alone will not be a valuable tool to
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measure
students' performance.

In conclusion
, I
firmly
believe that
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tests
should be a part of a subject syllabus.
Firstly
, exams
are timed
and should
be done
under pressure not knowing anything about the questions, which I
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think
serves as a better tool for assessing
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course
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performance
. And
secondly
, unlike exams,
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projects
are done
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outside of
the classroom and this can lead to plagiarism.
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IELTS essay Some people think the secondary school should study non-academic subjects such as Civic or Religious Studies. Others argue that this a waste of time and those children should only study academic subjects like mathematics and science. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
370 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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