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TPO 38 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Leadership comes naturally: one cannot learn to be a leader. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.3

TPO 38 Leadership comes naturally: one cannot learn to be a leader. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 3
Leadership is important part of our lives. People who has good leadership skills can influence many people and help them to succeed in their career. Some people believe that leadership comes naturally, while others disagree. In my humble opinion, I agree that being a good leader is not learned, but it is natural talent. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay. First of all, in every facet of people there are always a leader and a follower. Leader is the person responsible for the well being of the group, how they will succeed in work or craft. Leadership is a skill that is innate and there is no need for formal training to become successful leader. For example, my friend Ron runs his company in Makati. He really knows how to handle people well and his employees respect him because they feel Ron will help them to come out of their shell and shine. He push his employees to the full potential and later on will learn how to stand by themselves. When I ask my friend why does he have good leadership skills, he just answer it' s born naturally and he is fortunate enough that he can guide and motivate his employees to excel. Secondly, leadership is a sheer talent, no one will find a school who specializes in course in leadership 101. In other words, leadership is not earned but it is a privilege. My personal experience is a compelling example of this, when I was in freshman year my professor assigned me to lead a group of students in our science project. I led my group and asked them for ideas and things they can contribute to the project. I assigned them to different task, so that our work will be more easier and efficient. Each task is divided fairly and it' s there expertise they are working on. Upon completing our project, we are happy and contended with the end result of our project because we worked so hard and are cooperative with each other. All in all, I can say that in such a young age leadership is a talent that can' t be learned. To summarize, I believe that leadership comes naturally. This is because there is no such person who are capable teaching how to become a good leader. It is based on pure instinct and love for other people to be become successful in life.
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good
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can influence
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and
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people
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comes
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that being a
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good
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is not learned,
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it is natural talent. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.

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First of all
, in every facet of
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people
there are always a
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leader
and a follower.
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is the person responsible for the
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well being
of the group, how they will succeed in work or craft.
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is a
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skill
that is
innate and there is no need for formal training to become successful
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leader
.
For example
, my friend Ron runs his
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company
in
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Makati
. He
really
knows how to handle
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people
well and his employees respect him
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because
they feel Ron will
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help
them to
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come
out of their shell and shine. He
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push
his employees to the full potential and later on will learn how to stand by themselves. When I ask my friend why does he have
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good
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leadership
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skills
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naturally and
he is fortunate
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enough
that he can guide and motivate his employees to excel.

Secondly
,
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leadership
is a sheer talent, no one will find a school who specializes in course in
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leadership
101. In
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other
words,
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leadership
is not earned
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but
it is a privilege. My personal experience is a compelling example of this, when I was in freshman year my professor assigned me to lead a group of students in our science
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project
. I led my group and asked them for
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ideas
and things they can contribute to the
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project
. I assigned them to
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different
task,
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so
that our work will be
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more easier
and efficient. Each task
is divided
fairly
and
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it&
#039; s there expertise they are working on. Upon completing our
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project
, we are happy and contended with the
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end
result of our
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project
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because
we worked
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so
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hard
and are cooperative with each
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other
. All in all, I can say that in such a young age
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leadership
is a talent that
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can&
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be learned
.

To summarize
, I believe that
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leadership
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comes
naturally
. This is
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because
there is no such person who are capable teaching how to become a
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good
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leader
. It
is based
on pure instinct and
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love
for
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other
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people
to
be become
successful in life.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes

IELTS essay TPO 38 Leadership comes naturally: one cannot learn to be a leader. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
413 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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