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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Leadership comes naturally: one cannot learn to be a leader. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.48

Leadership comes naturally: one cannot learn to be a leader. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 48
It is argued that government expenditure on arts such as cinema and theatre is a waste and the funds should be spent on other things. This essay agrees that spending on art is futile. Supporters of this view argue that art is a way of life and it helps one to develop his culture. The era of Cinemas and theatres have contributed immensely to the revenue generation of the country and also improved social relationships amongst people. Moods have always been elevated after a public visit to such places of fun like the theatre and as a result of the recent rating by England as the happiest country in the world the government has since made it a priority to keep investing in art. In my own opinion, the best legacy any country can leave for its citizen is education and as a result, the government needs to focus on ensuring that the learning system is well developed and made accessible to its citizen. Therefore, funds for art which presently is not producing enough revenue must be diverted into the educational institution. Once education is affordable it would improve the economy of the country as these citizens would graduate and come back to invest the quality knowledge expended on them to better their nation. For instance, the UK introduced a budget cut of 10 percent in their education system in 2015 it was then reported that there was a high rate of redundancy in students as fees became higher and children of folks who could not afford them resulted into petty crime after dropping out of school. This would not have been the case if the budget had been improved. To conclude, although art helps to improve one's social wellbeing, in order to increase life expectancy and standard of living of the public, sole investments must be in the education system.
It
is argued
that
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government
expenditure on
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arts
such as cinema and
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theatre
is a waste and the funds should
be spent
on other things. This essay
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agrees
that spending on
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art
is futile.

Supporters of this view argue that
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art
is a way of life and it
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helps
one to develop his culture. The era of Cinemas and
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theatres
have contributed
immensely
to the revenue generation of the
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country
and
also
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improved
social relationships amongst
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people
. Moods have always
been elevated
after a public visit to such places of fun like the
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theatre
and
as a result
of the recent rating by England as the happiest
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country
in the world the
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government
has since made it a priority to
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keep
investing in art.

In my
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own
opinion, the best legacy any
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country
can
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leave
for its citizen is
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education
and
as a result
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
needs to focus on ensuring that the learning system is
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well developed
and made accessible to its citizen.
Therefore
, funds for
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art
which
presently
is not producing
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enough
revenue
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must
be diverted
into the educational institution. Once
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education
is affordable it would
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improve
the economy of the
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country
as these citizens would graduate and
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come
back to invest the quality knowledge expended on them to better their nation.
For instance
, the UK introduced a budget
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cut
of 10 percent in their
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education
system in 2015 it was then reported that there was a high rate of redundancy in students as fees became higher and children of folks who could not afford them resulted into petty crime after dropping out of school. This would not have been the case if the budget had been
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improved
.

To conclude
, although
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art
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helps
to
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improve
one's social
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wellbeing
, in order to increase life expectancy and standard of living of the public, sole investments
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must
be in the
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education
system.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Leadership comes naturally: one cannot learn to be a leader. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 48

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
311 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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