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TPO 34 - Question 2Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Private car should not be allowed in the city centers of large cities. Use details and examples to explain your opinion. v.1

TPO 34 - Question 2 Private car should not be allowed in the city centers of large cities. Use details and examples to explain your opinion. v. 1
According to some people, the number of boys and girls admitted to any course should be the same. In other words half of the seats should be reserved for male candidates and half should be reserved for female candidates. I do not agree with this view. In my opinion, merit, and not gender, should be the criterion for admission into university programmes. The argument that the number of boys and girls in each course should be the same is illogical in every aspect. To start with, it shows utter disregard for merit. If seats are reserved on the basis of gender, many meritorious students will fail to get admission. Also, while this move might seem to be an attempt to empower women by increasing their participation in university courses, that really is not the case. Almost every university in the world already admits both boys and girls. In order to secure admission to a university programme of her choice, a girl only has to get good grades. If she waits for reservation to gain admission, it is akin to admitting that her skills are not on par with those of male students. Another argument against reserving seats on the basis of gender is the difference in the aptitude of men and women. Certain courses like nursing, home science or teaching are more popular among the girls. Likewise, certain courses like engineering and mechanics are more popular among boys. If half of the seats are reserved for boys in a nursing course, chances are many seats will lie vacant. At the same time, many meritorious girls will fail to get admission. Even in courses where both boys and girls have the same aptitude, this arrangement will prevent many deserving candidates from gaining admission just because they belong to the other gender. To conclude, after analysing various scenarios that might arise from the implementation of this decision, it is not hard to see that reserving university seats on the basis of gender is unwise. It may dilute the quality of education by letting undeserving students in and preventing deserving students from securing admission.
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, the number of
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and
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admitted to any
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course
should be the same.
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half of the
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seats
should be
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reserved
for male candidates and half should be
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reserved
for female candidates. I do not
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agree
with this view. In my opinion, merit, and not gender, should be the criterion for
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admission
into
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university
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programmes
.

The argument that the number of
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boys
and
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girls
in each
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course
should be the same is illogical in every aspect. To
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with, it
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shows
utter disregard for merit. If
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seats
are
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reserved
on the basis of gender,
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many
meritorious students will fail to
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get
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admission
.
Also
, while this
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move
might seem to be an attempt to empower women by increasing their participation in
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university
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courses
, that
really
is not the case. Almost every
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university
in the world already admits both
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boys
and
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girls
. In order to secure
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admission
to a
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university
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programme
of her choice, a
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girl
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only
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has to
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get
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grades. If she waits for reservation to gain
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admission
, it is akin to
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admitting
that her
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skills
are not on par with those of male students.

Another argument against reserving
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seats
on the basis of gender is the difference in the aptitude of
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men
and women. Certain
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courses
like nursing, home science or teaching are more popular among the
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girls
.
Likewise
, certain
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courses
like engineering and mechanics are more popular among
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boys
. If half of the
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seats
are
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reserved
for
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boys
in a nursing
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course
, chances are
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will lie vacant. At the same time,
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meritorious
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will fail to
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get
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. Even in
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courses
where both
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boys
and
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have the same aptitude, this arrangement will
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prevent
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many
deserving candidates from gaining
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admission
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just
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because
they belong to the other gender.

To conclude
, after
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analysing
various scenarios that might arise from the implementation of this decision, it is not
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hard
to
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see
that reserving
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university
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seats
on the basis of gender is unwise. It may dilute the quality of education by letting undeserving students in and preventing deserving students from securing
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admission
.
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IELTS essay TPO 34 - Question 2 Private car should not be allowed in the city centers of large cities. Use details and examples to explain your opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
351 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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