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Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience Write at least 250 words v.1

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience Write at least 250 words v.1
The past 50 years have seen a tremendous growth in the field of science and technology. However, there are predominantly two contrasting views where one section of the society believes that university students should have freedom of choice regarding their subjects, while the other section believes that they should opt for science and technology as it will be more rewarding in the future. On the one hand, allowing students to select subjects of their own choice in universities will make them more interested in gaining knowledge. As a result, they will excel in a better manner in their respective fields. Furthermore, there are many other positions, such as of a charted accountant, a hotel manager or a banker, that requires competitive people and it can only be possible if students opt for other subjects (Economics, Accountancy) during their college life. On the other hand, career opportunities are on a rise in the field of science and technology. For instance, Science department in the Harvard university has predicted that by 2030, the requirement of people in technological fields will double. Moreover, high salaries are common for people in scientific fields and there is more scope for a student. In my opinion, giving precedence to scientific and technological subjects is unfair as it forces a student to select a particular field irrespective of their interests. Universities should provide complete independence to opt for any subject that a student desires. In conclusion, while there are certain benefits to study scientific subjects in college, it is essential that students are free to select any subject they want to excel in without any forceful imposition.
The past 50 years have
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seen
a tremendous growth in the
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field
of
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science
and technology.
However
, there are
predominantly
two contrasting views where one section of the society believes that
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university
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students
should have freedom of choice regarding their
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subjects
, while the
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other
section believes that they should opt for
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science
and technology as it will be more rewarding in the future.

On the one hand, allowing
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students
to select
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subjects
of their
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own
choice in
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universities
will
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make
them more interested in gaining knowledge.
As a result
, they will excel in a better manner in their respective
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fields
.
Furthermore
, there are
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many
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other
positions, such as of a charted accountant, a hotel manager or a banker, that requires competitive
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people
and it can
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only
be possible if
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students
opt for
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other
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subjects
(Economics, Accountancy) during their college life.

On the
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other
hand, career opportunities are on a rise in the
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field
of
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science
and technology.
For instance
,
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Science
department in the Harvard
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university
has predicted that by 2030, the requirement of
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people
in technological
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fields
will double.
Moreover
, high salaries are common for
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people
in scientific
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fields
and there is more scope for a student.

In my opinion, giving precedence to scientific and technological
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subjects
is unfair as it forces a
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student
to select a particular
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field
irrespective of their interests.
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Universities
should provide complete independence to opt for any
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subject
that a
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student
desires.

In conclusion
, while there are certain benefits to study scientific
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subjects
in college, it is essential that
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students
are free to select any
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subject
they want to excel in without any forceful imposition.
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IELTS essay Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience Write at least 250 words v.1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
270 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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