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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Private car should not be allowed in the city centers of large cities. Use details and examples to explain your opinion v.161

Private car should not be allowed in the city centers of large cities. Use details and examples to explain your opinion v. 161
In this modern era, success has been widely seen as an imperative possession. In our society, it is evaluated according to the amount of money a person can make. This essay will discuss why wealth is not the only factor to assess success, and will also illustrate another alternative that can be used to determine it, namely educational level. Measuring wealth can be a good way to estimate how successful a person has been throughout his lifetime. In fact, it is well-known that people who have a considerable fortune are one of the most successful in the community because money can represent what sort of comfort and profession one can have. For instance, doctors around the world are said to be prosperous due to the fact that they are well remunerated and therefore they can afford anything they want. However, this is not a completely reliable way to value people's achievement. Another way to determine a person's accomplishment is to measure his educational status. Unlike money which can be obtained be anyone, the level of someone's education is an important acquisition that can only be gain through have work, discipline and dedication. As an illustration, famous scientists are considered to be one of the most outstanding people because of the essential asset they possess which is knowledge. Undoubtedly, a person's intellect could certainly be used in a way to determine achievement in life. To conclude, it is a widely held view that success should be a very crucial aspect of our existence. Owning money can be viewed as being extremely prosperous, although this is not particularly accurate. A person's education instead can be efficiently chosen to assess success.
In this modern era,
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success
has been
widely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
as an imperative possession. In our society, it
is evaluated
according to the amount of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
a person can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
. This essay will discuss why wealth is not the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
factor to assess
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
success
, and will
also
illustrate another alternative that can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to determine it,
namely
educational level.

Measuring wealth can be a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
way to estimate how successful a person has been throughout his lifetime. In fact, it is well-known that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who have a considerable fortune are one of the most successful in the community
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
can represent what sort of comfort and profession one can have.
For instance
, doctors around the world
are said
to be prosperous due to the fact that they are well remunerated and
therefore
they can afford anything they want.
However
, this is not a completely reliable way to value
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
's achievement.

Another way to determine a person's accomplishment is to measure his educational status. Unlike
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
which can
be obtained
be anyone, the level of someone's education is an
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
acquisition that can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
be gain through have work, discipline and dedication. As an illustration,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
famous
scientists
are considered
to be one of the most outstanding
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of the essential asset they possess which is knowledge.
Undoubtedly
, a person's intellect could
certainly
be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
in a way to determine achievement in life.

To conclude
, it is a
widely
held view that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
success
should be a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
crucial aspect of our existence. Owning
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
can
be viewed
as being
extremely
prosperous, although this is not
particularly
accurate. A person's education
instead
can be
efficiently
chosen to assess
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
success
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Private car should not be allowed in the city centers of large cities. Use details and examples to explain your opinion v. 161

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
278 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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