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Increasing car usage in many large global cities has caused a number of problems. Some cities have proposed banning private vehicles from the city centre. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.6

Increasing car usage in many large global cities has caused a number of problems. Some cities have proposed banning private vehicles from the city centre. v. 6
Owing to the hazards caused by the increased use of automobiles in the metropolis, it has been suggested by some that private cars should be prohibited from plying the cities. In my opinion, I agree that vehicles should be banned as its continued use causes environmental pollution and also road accidents. Firstly, the major reason cars must be banned from using the main roads is because of environmental pollution. As a result of high usage, there is an increased emission of CO2 to the atmosphere which leads to the warming of the earth. This climate change is very detrimental to humans as it could result in life threatening diseases and, therefore, shortening the life expectancy of human beings. For example, after the United States environmental law was enacted in 2015 to reduce car usage, there was a drastic reduction in terminal illness such as cancer and kidney failure as reported by the WHO. Another point to consider is that curbing car usage will reduce accident rates. Most private car owners are very poor drivers and are always prone to breaking traffic rules and, therefore, causing accidents. Therefore, banning their vehicle movements will help reduce the rate at which these harmful occurrences occur. For example, as reported by the road safety commission, the accident rates on Lagos-Ibadan expressway in 2016 dropped from 50% to 5% after the state government limited the use of cars on the road. To sum up, in order to preserve lives of humans and reduce accidents, it is highly necessary for cars to be banned from using major roads. It is recommended that the government enforce drivers to uphold all traffic laws at all times.
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use
of automobiles in the metropolis, it has
been suggested
by
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some
that private
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cars
should
be prohibited
from plying the cities. In my opinion, I
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agree
that vehicles should
be banned
as its continued
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use
causes environmental pollution and
also
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road
accidents.

Firstly
, the major reason
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cars
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must
be banned
from using the main
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roads
is
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because
of environmental pollution.
As a result
of high usage, there is an increased emission of CO2 to the atmosphere which leads to the warming of the earth. This climate
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change
is
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very
detrimental to humans as it could result in life threatening diseases and,
therefore
, shortening the life expectancy of human beings.
For example
, after the United States environmental law
was enacted
in 2015 to
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reduce
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car
usage, there was a drastic reduction in terminal illness such as cancer and kidney failure as reported by the WHO.

Another point to consider is that curbing
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car
usage will
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reduce
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accident
rates. Most private
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car
owners are
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very
poor drivers and are always prone to breaking traffic
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rules
and,
therefore
, causing
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accidents
.
Therefore
, banning their vehicle movements will
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help
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reduce
the rate at which these harmful occurrences occur.
For example
, as reported by the
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road
safety commission, the
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accident
rates on Lagos-Ibadan expressway in 2016 dropped from 50% to 5% after the state
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government
limited the
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use
of
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cars
on the road.

To sum up, in order to preserve
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lives
of humans and
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reduce
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accidents
, it is
highly
necessary for
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cars
to
be banned
from using major
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roads
. It
is recommended
that the
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government
enforce drivers to uphold all traffic laws at all times.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Increasing car usage in many large global cities has caused a number of problems. Some cities have proposed banning private vehicles from the city centre. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
278 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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