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tpo 39Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.1

tpo 39 In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1
Of late, protecting an environment has been a prevailing concern significant part of the world. A sea change has been witnessed the researchers was Warned people From many years about the global climate, they said that human should use Limited Resources of energy. However, masses neglected the warnings of scientists. The following paragraphs would shed light on the possible reasons for the problems and purpose some handful of remedial purposes. To commence with reasons, first and foremost is mostly individuals prefer for commuting by private vehicles. The people use this transport for travelling to their workplace, due to this many people face traffic problems and a major cause diesel and petrol vehicles release CO² gas in Atmosphere. Secondly, the business person run their firms in the city. As a result, these factories Produced harmful toxic chemicals in Air, which make impure oxygen air for Masses. Adding further, a lot of people cut down the trees for their beneficial purpose, with that they sell this wood in Market and make that place empty for building some houses. Undoubtedly, every lock has a key. Similarly, some solutions should be implemented people should use Public Mode of transport in their daily intervals. Like: Cityride, railways and many more. Moreover, the higher authorities should not give Permission to any companies for opening in the city. Even more, Government can put your best foot forward against the deforestation, nowadays. The higher council should make strict rules and regulations for everyone do not cut the trees and make our environment dirty. To recapitulate, I would like to state that higher authority and individual both should put their best foot forward together protection of habitat. The government should provide awareness camps and advertisement on television for people from there they should encourage their self and give best to save the earth.
Of late, protecting an environment has been a prevailing concern significant part of the world. A sea
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
has
been witnessed
the researchers
was Warned
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
From
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
years about the global climate, they said that human should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
Limited Resources of energy.
However
, masses neglected the warnings of scientists. The following paragraphs would shed light on the possible reasons for the problems and purpose
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
handful of remedial purposes.

To commence with reasons,
first
and foremost is
mostly
individuals prefer for commuting by private vehicles. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
this transport for travelling to their workplace, due to this
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
face traffic problems and a major cause diesel and petrol vehicles release
Possible spelling mistake found.
CO²
gas in Atmosphere.
Secondly
, the business person run their firms in the city.
As a result
, these factories Produced harmful toxic chemicals in Air, which
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
make
impure oxygen air for Masses. Adding
further
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cut
down the trees for their beneficial purpose, with that they sell this wood in Market and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
make
that place empty for building
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
houses
.

Undoubtedly
, every lock has a key.
Similarly
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
solutions should
be implemented
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
Public Mode of transport in their daily intervals. Like:
Possible spelling mistake found.
Cityride
, railways and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
more.
Moreover
, the higher authorities should not give Permission to any
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
for opening in the city. Even more,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Government
can put your best foot forward against the deforestation, nowadays. The higher council should
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
make
strict
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
and regulations for everyone
The pronoun 'everyone' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "does", "did".
do
not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cut
the trees and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
make
our environment dirty.

To recapitulate, I would like to state that higher authority and individual both should put their best foot forward together protection of habitat. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should provide awareness camps and advertisement on television for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
from there they should encourage their self and give best to save the earth.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay tpo 39 In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
304 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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