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TPO 33 TASK 4ReadingCarring CapacityAn animal species needs to have enough resources, like food and water, to survive in any given environment. However, because resources are limited, only a certain number of animals of a particular species are able to su v.1

TPO 33 TASK 4ReadingCarring CapacityAn animal species needs to have enough resources, like food and water, to survive in any given environment. However, because resources are limited, only a certain number of animals of a particular species are able to su v. 1
It has been a debatable issue whether to keep history or not in school curriculum. While some believe that learning about the past study is no more useful, others opine that history can teach us many things now and make able to interpret the future. On the one hand, it is considered by some that learning about the past incidents is the waste of time. As history consists century and date of the particular event and by remembering these dates people cannot come up with any valuable information which help them in the future. Moreover, it is thought by some that the subjects like maths and science are more informative to learn instead of history. This is because history never repeats itself again and again. Through learning maths and science students are able to make their future career. Hence, some argue past study has nothing to impart. On the other hand, some opine that we can learn present well by studying past events. This is because we would come to know about the culture of one’s country. For example, in India, the history behind Taj Mahal would be known to us due to the storage of past records. Moreover, it gives broaden the view that how our freedom fighters sacrificed their lives to give us a better life. If we had not studied the past events, we would not have known about their struggles. Therefore, I completely agree that history is important to learn. In conclusion, in spite of providing better career in future, I believe that learning history is imperative to know about the tradition and culture of any country.
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behind Taj Mahal would
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records.
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, we would not have known about their struggles.
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IELTS essay TPO 33 TASK 4ReadingCarring CapacityAn animal species needs to have enough resources, like food and water, to survive in any given environment. However, because resources are limited, only a certain number of animals of a particular species are able to su v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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