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TPO-31- Independent Writing TaskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement? Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the pastUse specific reasons and examples to s v.2

TPO-31- Independent Writing Task Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the pastUse specific reasons and examples to s v. 2
Today we all are living in a fast-moving twenty-first century. This twenty-first century is the era of technological innovation, and now we have more facilities compare to the people in the past. Although some people believe that people in the past, had a very simple life, and so they were more happy than us today, I disagree with this view. I believe that today, we are happier than people were in the past. I have some reasons to follow my viewpoint. First, I believe that heath is the first wealth, and a healthy person is considered the happiest person in his world. Today, an excellent medical facility is available everywhere, even the smallest town has a government medical hospital to take care of poor people. Inventions of antibiotics, diagnostic tools and procedures, and because of expert doctors, the mortality and morbidity rate has been reduced all over in the world. People are living healthier, longer and satisfactory life compare to past. Recently I read one medical journal presenting the data of average life expectancy which has increased from 67 to 76years. Second, today, we have more facilities in our life, like we have air-conditioner, heater, washing machine, dishwasher, microwave and oven at our home. We have water purifier machines with us. Because of all these tools, physical stress has been reduced in our routine life and hence our life has become easier and comfortable. Finally, today, we have more fun and entertainment in our life compare to people of past. We have large t. v, home theater, and music system at home to relax our own selves. As present-day, people have easy and fast transportation; people can go out to enjoy their vacations. People in the past generally used to go to relatives place to enjoy their vacation, for example, I remember that when I was a child, at that time I usually went to my maternal uncle’s place each summer vacation. I never visited beautiful tourist places. Recently, in California, I see lots of people from all around the world in the summer vacation. Now, people are more educated than people in the past, so have more money for the entertainment, clothes and food. Today, we eat varieties of fruits and dry fruits daily, as we know the importance of all these things in our life, moreover, we can afford to buy them for our family. People in the past had very limited income, and so they had fruits when someone in the family had some health issues or advised by a doctor. In a nutshell, in a quickly changing world, as people are living a healthier, happier life with fun and satisfaction, it is wrong to say that today people are less happy or satisfied in their life than people were in the past.
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Today
we all are living in a
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fast
-moving twenty-
first
century. This twenty-
first
century is the era of technological innovation, and
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now
we have more facilities compare to the
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people
in the
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past
. Although
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some
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people
believe that
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people
in the
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past
, had a
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very
simple
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life
, and
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so
they were more happy than us
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today
, I disagree with this view. I believe that
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today
, we are happier than
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people
were in the
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past
. I have
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some
reasons to follow my viewpoint.

First
, I believe that heath is the
first
wealth, and a healthy person
is considered
the happiest person in his
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world
.
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Today
, an excellent medical facility is available everywhere, even the smallest town has a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
medical hospital to take care of poor
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
. Inventions of antibiotics, diagnostic tools and procedures, and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of expert doctors, the mortality and morbidity rate has been
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
all over in the
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world
.
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People
are living healthier, longer and satisfactory
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life
compare to
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past
. Recently I read one medical journal presenting the data of average
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life
expectancy which has increased from 67 to 76years.

Second,
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today
, we have more facilities in our
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life
, like we have air-conditioner, heater, washing machine, dishwasher, microwave and oven at our home. We have water purifier machines with us.
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Because
of all these tools, physical
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stress
has been
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reduced
in our routine
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life
and
hence
our
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life
has become easier and comfortable.

Finally
,
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today
, we have more fun and entertainment in our
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life
compare to
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people
of
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past
. We have large t. v, home theater, and music system at home to relax our
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own
selves. As present-day,
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people
have easy and
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fast
transportation;
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people
can go out to enjoy their
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vacations
.
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People
in the
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past
generally
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used
to go to relatives place to enjoy their
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vacation
,
for example
, I remember that when I was a child, at that time I
usually
went to my maternal uncle’s place each summer
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vacation
. I never visited
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beautiful
tourist places. Recently, in California, I
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see
lots of
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people
from all around the
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world
in the summer
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vacation
.
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Now
,
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people
are more educated than
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people
in the
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past
,
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so
have more money for the entertainment, clothes and food.
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Today
, we eat varieties of fruits and dry fruits daily, as we know the importance of all these things in our
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life
,
moreover
, we can afford to
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buy
them for our family.
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People
in the
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past
had
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very
limited income, and
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so
they had fruits when someone in the family had
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
health issues or advised by a doctor.

In a nutshell, in a
quickly
changing
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world
, as
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people
are living a healthier, happier
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life
with fun and satisfaction, it is
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wrong
to say that
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today
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people
are less happy or satisfied in their
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life
than
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people
were in the
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past
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
52Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay TPO-31- Independent Writing Task Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the pastUse specific reasons and examples to s v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
466 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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