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TPO 26 - Question 6Using the examples from the talk, explain two ways that a product's container can be designed to appeal to consumers. v.1

TPO 26 - Question 6Using the examples from the talk, explain two ways that a product's container can be designed to appeal to consumers. v. 1
In all over the world, art plays, a symbol for different cultures, but nowadays mostly people do not consider it, as useful as science, technology and business. In this essay, we are going to explain some significant reasons and solutions to encourage society to take part in the art world. To begin with, our ancestors were fond of creativity, but our generation has less interested. First the foremost, mortals have less time. To explain with, due to modernization of tech, high profile occupation, upgrade science, most of the individuals might spend their more hours either in their work or in their education as there is too much competition among in the world or humans to become successful. Although needs leisure time to create something new, sometimes the skilled people left behind their talent in this busy life. Furthermore, in this modern era, there is much more respect, pay scale, good lifestyle and great scope in the profession of science, business and engineering than students of art. To explicate, artists often suffer to exhibit their work in front of public and government, also very few people appreciate them. They rarely get the actual cost of their hard work and creativity. Hence, they struggle with life and quit their field. For instance, if we browse a list of artists and businessman in Google, the result will shock us. There is a huge proportion gap. On the contrary, to built interest in art among society, primarily, I think not only government but also great entrepreneurs invests their some revenue in the art field. To substantiate, if the administration and businessman, start more companies to encourage art, in this way they will generate so many jobs of creators, also they can earn more profit with it since these arts are unique and expensive. Apart from this, schools and colleges could be cheered up the pupils, to give them a different task during their academic session, so that children could make up their inner talent and might built wonderful career ahead. Thus, they create various masterpieces in their own mind. To exemplify, there are many schools, who start different curricular activities to find out the hidden talent in kids. To conclude, we should not be only depend on scientific area, this is a duty of everyone to keep and establish companies to built job opportunities and give children a lesson learn. How art is essential for culture and community?
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plays, a symbol for
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different
cultures,
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nowadays
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people
do not consider it, as useful as science, technology and business. In this essay, we are going to
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explain
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some
significant reasons and solutions to encourage society to
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take part
in the
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art
world.

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begin
with, our ancestors were fond of creativity,
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but
our generation has less interested.
First
the foremost, mortals have less time. To
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explain
with, due to modernization of tech, high profile occupation, upgrade science, most of the individuals might spend their more hours either in their work or in their education as there is too much competition among in the world or humans to become successful. Although needs leisure time to create something new,
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sometimes
the skilled
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people
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left
behind their talent in this busy life.
Furthermore
, in this modern era, there is much more respect, pay scale,
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good
lifestyle and great scope in the profession of science, business and engineering than students of
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art
. To explicate, artists
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often
suffer to exhibit their work in front of public and
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government
,
also
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very
few
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people
appreciate them. They rarely
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get
the actual cost of their
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hard
work and creativity.
Hence
, they struggle with life and quit their field.
For instance
, if we browse a list of artists and businessman in Google, the result will shock us. There is a huge proportion gap.

On the contrary
, to built interest in
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art
among society,
primarily
, I
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not
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government
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but
also
great entrepreneurs invests their
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some
revenue in the
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art
field. To substantiate, if the administration and businessman,
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start
more
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companies
to encourage
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art
, in this way they will generate
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so
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many
jobs of creators,
also
they can earn more profit with it since these
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arts
are unique and expensive. Apart from this, schools and colleges could
be cheered
up the pupils, to give them a
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different
task during their academic session,
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so
that children could
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make
up their inner talent and might built wonderful career ahead.
Thus
, they create various masterpieces in their
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own
mind. To exemplify, there are
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many
schools, who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
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different
curricular activities to find out the hidden talent in kids.

To conclude
, we should not be
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only
depend on scientific area, this is a duty of everyone to
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keep
and establish
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companies
to built job opportunities and give children a lesson learn. How
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art
is essential for culture and community?
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Ludwig Wittgenstein

IELTS essay TPO 26 - Question 6Using the examples from the talk, explain two ways that a product's container can be designed to appeal to consumers. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
404 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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