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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words. v.22

Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. v. 22
It has been argued that many governments think that economic success is the most significant way to reach goals where other people think that there are lots of things such as a green environment, cultural diversity, security, traditions, and peace among nations are important issues. This essay will delve both points of view with appropriate examples from my knowledge or experience. To commence, economic development helps to achieve a target of the government. Economic development is the advance where the government can able to take more challenges. Through economic evolution, the government can able to develop education, medical, health, accommodation, and so on. A country’s structural advancement also relies on economic expansion. If any first world country wants to make a comparison with a developing country that is only economic prosperity. For example, the International economist has already declared that the momentum of financially solicited countries depends on 90 percent to economic hike. On the flip side, there are lots of determining factors that ensure the country’s improvement. A green environment can ensure the overall growth of the environment. Cultural diversity stabilizes economic production by maintaining rules and regulations. Security acts as a guard to all developments. Traditions ensure the historic value of a nation that has a deeper link to the progress. Without peace among the citizens, a nation’s evolution can’t be thought of. As a result, cultural diversity, security, traditions, and peace can play a vital role in all kinds of expansion. In conclusion, there is no denying fact that economic progress is the backbone of any country’s expansion. However, there are other types of factors that make remarkable advance of a nation.
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that
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economic
success is the most significant way to reach goals where other
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people
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that there are lots of things such as a green environment, cultural diversity, security, traditions, and peace among
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nations
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important
issues. This essay will delve both points of view with appropriate examples from my knowledge or experience.

To commence,
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economic
development
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helps
to achieve a target of the
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government
.
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Economic
development is the advance where the
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government
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can able to
take more challenges. Through
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economic
evolution, the
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government
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can able to
develop education, medical, health, accommodation, and
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so
on. A
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country’s
structural advancement
also
relies on
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economic
expansion.
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If
any
first
world
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country
wants to
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make
a comparison with a developing
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country
that is
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only
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economic
prosperity.
For example
, the International economist has already declared that the momentum of
financially
solicited
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countries
depends on 90 percent to
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economic
hike.

On the flip side, there are lots of determining factors that ensure the
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country’s
improvement. A green environment can ensure the
overall
growth of the environment. Cultural diversity stabilizes
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economic
production by maintaining
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rules
and regulations. Security acts as a guard to all developments. Traditions ensure the historic value of a
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nation
that has a deeper link to the progress. Without peace among the citizens, a
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nation’s
evolution can’t be
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thought
of.
As a result
, cultural diversity, security, traditions, and peace can play a vital role in all kinds of expansion.

In conclusion
, there is no denying fact that
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economic
progress is the backbone of any
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country’s
expansion.
However
, there are other types of factors that
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make
remarkable advance of a
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nation
.
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IELTS essay Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. v. 22

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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