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Some movies are serious, designed to make the audience think. Other movies are designed primarily to amuse and entertain. Which type of movie do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.1

Some movies are serious, designed to make the audience think. Other movies are designed primarily to amuse and entertain. Which type of movie do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1
Nowadays people entertain themselves by watching different kinds of movies. It completely depends on the person's interest, whether its comedy film or else message oriented film. According to me, I like amusement, based films after a long day of work, but sometimes my friends insist on watching a fantastic or scary movie just to diversify our repertory. One on the hand, comedies make one laugh. People can just relax, buy a bottle of soda and some popcorn and enjoy those moments. Such movies allow them to take a break from the rigors of life by making them laugh and putting in a good mood. Usually, we go to the cinema theatre once a month because in this case we always find new fun to watch. I like those moments when it is dark and one just can enjoy the actions from a large screen. On the other hand, I do like movies that make me think. Sometimes I really fascinated the plot or performance. For example, "Traffic", a movie about drugs and young people, is very touching and topical. From my point of view, every family should watch this picture together and discuss the important aspects of it. One more example of this kind of movies is "Mister G". It is about a little boy who needed surgery to live. His heart did not work properly, so a boy needed another one to survive. Basically, the movie is about a family that faces many difficulties and obstacles, trying to save their only child. I think that humankind needs such movies. First of all, they help people enjoy their life and be grateful. Second of all, they help people realize that they are a big family. In summary, I think that every movie must teach us to be kind, strong and grateful.
Nowadays
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people
entertain themselves by watching
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different
kinds of
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movies
. It completely depends on the person's interest, whether its comedy film or else message oriented film.
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According to me
, I like amusement, based films after a long day of work,
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but
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sometimes
my friends insist on watching a fantastic or scary
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movie
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just
to diversify our repertory.

One on the hand, comedies
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make
one laugh.
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People
can
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just
relax,
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buy
a bottle of soda and
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some
popcorn and enjoy those moments. Such
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movies
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allow
them to take a break from the rigors of life by making them laugh and putting in a
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good
mood.
Usually
, we go to the cinema
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theatre
once a month
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because
in this case
we always find new fun to
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watch
. I like those moments when it is dark and one
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just
can enjoy the actions from a large screen.

On the other hand
, I do like
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movies
that
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make
me
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think
.
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Sometimes
I
really
fascinated the plot or performance.
For example
,
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"
Traffic
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"
, a
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movie
about drugs and young
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people
, is
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very
touching and topical. From my point of view, every family should
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watch
this picture together and discuss the
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important
aspects of it. One more example of this kind of
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movies
is
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"
Mister G
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"
. It is about a
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little
boy who needed surgery to
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live
. His heart did not work
properly
,
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so
a boy needed another one to survive.
Basically
, the
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movie
is about a family that faces
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many
difficulties and obstacles, trying to save their
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only
child. I
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think
that humankind needs such
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movies
.
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First of all
, they
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help
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people
enjoy their life and be grateful. Second of all, they
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help
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people
realize that they are a
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big
family.

In summary, I
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think
that every
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movie
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must
teach us to be kind, strong and grateful.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some movies are serious, designed to make the audience think. Other movies are designed primarily to amuse and entertain. Which type of movie do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
301 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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