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TPO-25 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.1

TPO-25 - Independent Writing Task Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1
Without a shadow of the doubt having a good community plays a vital role in social development and improvement. We live in our community and it effects on us in various aspects. Many people contend that young peole do not have enough time to help their communities, while others assert it is not true. Both of the opposing arguments appear to be some what convincing and stand to point. However, my personal experience and actual observation of life have led me to agree that young people can be very influential in their communities. In the ensuing lines, I delve into my reasons to substantiate my point. The first and probably the most reason is that we send our kids to schools to prepare them for living in a community. In schools they can learn different things and they can enhance their skills and abilities to do different tasks. After they get elder, we can give them responsibilities to do like cleaning dishes at home, buying vegetables or other things. Taking this kind of responsibilities are the firs steps in entering to the real world. Consequently, they can get part time jobs and by having a job they can do their actions in community. As a result, young people can improve the condition of their nation. Another point springing to mind is that entering universities is a so much promising step into a world of opportunities. As an individual, we can have a chance to be an expert in our fileds. If we do our tasks in university, we will be a successful person and our succedb by defult can lead to a big impression in our community. For example, my father is a scientist in chemistry field. Two years ago he decided to built an institute for all the scientists in my country, where they can do their experiments. Recently, they discoverd a new material that can be very useful in fabricating advanced devices. As you can see, people and especially young people can do useful actions toward their communities' enhancement. Although the mentioned reasons are the first ones cross to the mind as reasons young people can be effective in society. There is a posibility that they do not do actions for improving their country. So, in this way they have bad impression on society. However, I affirm that young people are effective in creating a good situation in country and by managing the situation and breeding good kids the disadvantages can be neglected. To sum it all up, it is easy see that young people are effective in society. They can be responsible and do their tasks during their childood and after entering universities they can be an expert in their field of specialty. I hope someday we all breed good kids to have a better society. The more our kids improve, the greater our society will enhance.
Without a shadow of the doubt having a
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good
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community
plays a vital role in social development and improvement. We
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live
in our
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community
and it effects on us in various aspects.
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people
contend that
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young
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peole
do not have
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enough
time to
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help
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communities
, while others assert it is not true. Both of the opposing arguments appear to be
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some what
convincing and stand to point.
However
, my personal experience and actual observation of life have led me to
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agree
that
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young
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people
can be
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very
influential in their
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communities
. In the ensuing lines, I delve into my
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reasons
to substantiate my point.

The
first
and
probably
the most
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reason
is that we
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send
our
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kids
to schools to prepare them for living in a
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community
. In
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schools they
can learn
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different
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things and
they can enhance their
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skills
and abilities to do
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different
tasks. After they
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get
elder, we can give them responsibilities to do like cleaning dishes at home, buying vegetables or other things. Taking this kind of responsibilities are the firs steps in entering to the real world.
Consequently
, they can
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get
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part time
jobs and by having a job they can do their actions in
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community
.
As a result
,
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young
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people
can
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improve
the condition of their nation.

Another point springing to mind is that entering universities is a
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so
much promising step into a world of opportunities. As an individual, we can have a chance to be an expert in our
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fileds
. If we do our tasks in university, we will be a successful person and our
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succedb
by
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defult
can lead to a
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big
impression in our
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community
.
For example
, my father is a scientist in chemistry field. Two years ago he decided
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to built
an institute for all the scientists in my country, where they can do their experiments. Recently, they
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discoverd
a new material that can be
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very
useful in fabricating advanced devices. As you can
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see
,
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people
and
especially
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young
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people
can do useful actions toward their
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communities&
#039; enhancement.

Although the mentioned
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reasons
are the
first
ones cross to the mind as
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reasons
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young
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people
can be effective in
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society
. There is a
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posibility
that they do not do actions for improving their country.
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, in this way they have
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bad
impression on
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society
.
However
, I affirm that
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young
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people
are effective in creating a
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good
situation in country and by managing the situation and breeding
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good
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kids
the disadvantages can
be neglected
.

To sum it all up, it is easy
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see
that
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young
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people
are effective in
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society
. They can be responsible and do their tasks during their
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childood
and after entering universities they can be an expert in their field of specialty. I hope someday we all breed
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good
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kids
to have a better
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society
. The more our
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kids
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improve
, the greater our
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society
will enhance.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
40Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Mistakes
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IELTS essay TPO-25 - Independent Writing Task Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
480 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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