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TPO 18 - Question 4Using the example of the pronghorn and lion, explain the concept of a relict behavior. v.1

TPO 18 - Question 4Using the example of the pronghorn and lion, explain the concept of a relict behavior. v. 1
Evaluation methods of a student’s performance have always been an area of contention around the world. Many believe that this can be done by continual assessment of their assignments and project work. On the other hand, people are also in favour of formal examination. I believe the latter is a more appropriate option. This can be proved by analysing the fact that the homework and projects done at home can be copied and also the memory of a student can be tested in a formal test only. Firstly, the workbook assignments submitted by the students are not always done by them. A study by the education department of India proved that many parents help their children in the completion of assignments. Not only this, the projects are also copied in order to submit the same on time. Thus, we can say that it is not a reliable method to judge student capabilities. Secondly, the examination that is taken in education institutes makes students learn the concept and also memorise the same that they have studied in their class. Moreover, these are conducted in the presence of Invigilator. Hence, restricting students to take any external help. This shows how much grasping power does an individual have. Therefore, this can be considered as a more reliable method of testing one’s ability. To conclude, looking at the discussion it is clear that advantages of formal testing outweigh the advantages of testing by assignments and projects. I believe the method should be implied across the globe and it can be predicted that many countries will adopt this way of assessment because of its effectiveness.
Evaluation
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methods
of a
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student’s
performance have always been an area of contention around the world.
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Many
believe that this can
be done
by continual assessment of their
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assignments
and
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project
work.
On the other hand
,
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people
are
also
in
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favour
of formal examination. I believe the latter is a more appropriate option. This can
be proved
by
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analysing
the fact that the homework and
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projects
done at home can
be copied
and
also
the memory of a
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student
can be
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tested
in a formal
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test
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only
.

Firstly
, the workbook
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assignments
submitted by the
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students
are not always done by them. A study by the education department of India proved that
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
parents
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
their children in the completion of
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assignments
. Not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
this, the
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projects
are
also
copied in order to submit the same on time.
Thus
, we can say that it is not a reliable
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method
to judge
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student
capabilities.

Secondly
, the examination that
is taken
in education institutes
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makes
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students
learn the concept and
also
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memorise
the same that they have studied in their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
.
Moreover
, these
are conducted
in the presence of Invigilator.
Hence
, restricting
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students
to take any external
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
. This
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
how much grasping power does an individual have.
Therefore
, this can
be considered
as a more reliable
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method
of testing one’s ability.

To conclude
, looking at the discussion it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
that advantages of formal testing outweigh the advantages of testing by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
assignments
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
projects
. I believe the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
method
should
be implied
across the globe and it can
be predicted
that
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
countries will adopt this way of assessment
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of its effectiveness.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay TPO 18 - Question 4Using the example of the pronghorn and lion, explain the concept of a relict behavior. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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