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The road in front of your house got damaged a long ago and nothing has been done about it. Write a letter to the municipal authority complaining about the damaged road. In your letter: • introduce yourself• explain the condition of the road• and sugge v.1

The road in front of your house got damaged a long ago and nothing has been done about it. Write a letter to the municipal authority complaining about the damaged road. In your letter: • introduce yourself• explain the condition of the road• and sugge v. 1
These days, the way of bringing up kids is changing tremendously as compared to past few decades. Parents think they can manage all the things by themselves and they can look after their children better than other members of the family. However, I think that whole family plays a significant role in upbringing of an offspring. To begin with, when children live in the joint family under one roof, they can learn umpteen values from each family member. They will learn sharing things, caring for others, standing by each other's side in ups and downs. And in this era, almost every kid has working parents; in this case children will always have someone around them to take care of them in their parent's absence. To exemplify, my parents were working and my grandmother used to look after me in my childhood. She gave me incredible values for life which I still follow. On the other hand, if parents will bring up their kids alone, it will be quite stressful for them. As new parents, it will be very difficult for them to manage things in the absence of experienced or elderly people. Even if they can manage all sorts of circumstances, still sometimes they need their personal space which is only possible by taking help from family. For example, if parents leave their kids at day care, it will be financially stressful for them and child can feel isolated too. In view of the arguments outlined above, I will conclude by saying that the upbringing of children in the presence of the whole family has several benefits. Children will become good citizens by learning good manners from people with different personalities. It will help them to deal with people of different nature and attitude.
These days, the way of bringing up
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kids
is changing
tremendously
as compared to past few decades.
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think
they can manage all the things by
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themselves and
they can look after their
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children
better than other members of the
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family
.
However
, I
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think
that whole
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family
plays a significant role in upbringing of an offspring.

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begin
with, when
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children
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live
in the joint
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family
under one roof, they can learn umpteen values from each
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family
member. They will learn sharing things, caring for others, standing by each other's side in ups and downs. And in this era, almost every
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kid
has working
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parents
;
in this case
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children
will always have someone around them to take care of them in their parent's absence. To exemplify, my
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parents
were working and my grandmother
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used
to look after me in my childhood. She gave me incredible values for life which I
still
follow.

On the other hand
, if
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parents
will bring up their
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kids
alone, it will be quite stressful for them. As new
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parents
, it will be
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difficult for them to manage things in the absence of experienced or elderly
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people
. Even if they can manage all sorts of circumstances,
still
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sometimes
they need their personal space which is
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only
possible by taking
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help
from
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family
.
For example
, if
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parents
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leave
their
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kids
at day care, it will be
financially
stressful for them and child can feel isolated too.

In view of the arguments outlined above, I will conclude by saying that the upbringing of
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children
in the presence of the whole
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family
has several benefits.
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Children
will become
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good
citizens by learning
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good
manners from
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people
with
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different
personalities. It will
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help
them to deal with
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people
of
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different
nature and attitude.
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IELTS essay The road in front of your house got damaged a long ago and nothing has been done about it. Write a letter to the municipal authority complaining about the damaged road. In your letter: • introduce yourself• explain the condition of the road• and sugge v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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