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TOEFL Task Question 4: Relict BehaviorIn general, animals act in ways that help them to survive within their specific habitats. However, sometimes an animal species may display a behavior that no longer serves a clear purpose. The original purpose for the v.1

TOEFL Task Question 4: Relict BehaviorIn general, animals act in ways that help them to survive within their specific habitats. However, sometimes an animal species may display a behavior that no longer serves a clear purpose. The original purpose for the v. 1
It is shown in the recent studies that increasing trend of online shopping will make a significant impact on downtown shopping complexes. I completely disagree that this trend will ever make a significant impact on local shops because the online shopping is an option, not the only option to shop and moreover, many people want to see and feel the product before buying. Firstly, online shopping is one more convenience to buy things. Just like some people prefer home deliveries of their daily needs over going and buying physically due to lack of time. It is not with everyone, some people prefer to go and pick fresh fruits on their own. Online shopping gave us the option to buy what we want to shop. Further, it is not the case with all the type of products, like expensive items, people prefer to buy those items by going to store. For example, people who do not have patience, always prefer to go and buy the product, as they feel it is not wise to wait for delivery. Finally, some people think that it is always better to feel and see what they are buying. In online shopping one cannot see the product, they can only read testimonials and reviews. Which is not always sufficient to judge a product worth buying. Although, personally I also believe that sometimes it is very difficult to choose online, due to their vague description and unreliable reviews. When one buys a product from a local shop, he can thoroughly check and make a decision, on the other hand, in online sometimes it is a painful first wait for the product to arrive and then return after dissatisfaction. To conclude, even though online shopping gave us a good option to shop, I believe that it will not outweigh our traditional way of going to the shop and buy the products.
It
is shown
in the recent studies that increasing trend of
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online
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shopping
will
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make
a significant impact on downtown
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shopping
complexes. I completely disagree that this trend will ever
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make
a significant impact on local
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shops
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because
the
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online
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shopping
is an
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option
, not the
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only
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option
to
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shop
and
moreover
,
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many
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people
want to
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see
and feel the
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product
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before
buying.

Firstly
,
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online
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shopping
is one more convenience to
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buy
things.
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Just
like
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some
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people
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prefer
home deliveries of their daily needs over going and buying
physically
due to lack of time. It is not with everyone,
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some
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people
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prefer
to go and pick fresh fruits on their
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own
.
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Online
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shopping
gave us the
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option
to
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buy
what we want to
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shop
.
Further
, it is not the case with all the type of
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products
, like expensive items,
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people
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prefer
to
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buy
those items by going to store.
For example
,
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people
who do not have patience, always
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prefer
to go and
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buy
the
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product
, as they feel it is not wise to wait for delivery.

Finally
,
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some
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people
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think
that it is always better to feel and
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see
what they are buying. In
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online
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shopping
one cannot
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see
the
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product
, they can
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only
read testimonials and reviews.
“Which” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Which
is not always sufficient to judge a
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product
worth buying. Although,
personally
I
also
believe that
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sometimes
it is
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very
difficult to choose
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online
, due to their vague description and unreliable reviews. When one
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buys
a
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product
from a local
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shop
, he can
thoroughly
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check
and
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make
a decision,
on the other hand
, in
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online
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sometimes
it is a painful
first
wait for the
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product
to arrive and then return after dissatisfaction.

To conclude
,
even though
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online
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shopping
gave us a
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good
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option
to
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shop
, I believe that it will not outweigh our traditional way of going to the
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shop
and
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buy
the
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products
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay TOEFL Task Question 4: Relict BehaviorIn general, animals act in ways that help them to survive within their specific habitats. However, sometimes an animal species may display a behavior that no longer serves a clear purpose. The original purpose for the v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
313 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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