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TPO 17 – task 2: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most advertisements make products seem much better than they are. v.2

TPO 17 – task 2: Most advertisements make products seem much better than they are. v. 2
Advertisements comprise a major part of television programs and newspapers. Companies use various advertisement methods to inform the people about their new products and to compete with other companies. Some people agree that most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are; some others disagree. In my opinion, I approve the statement and here are my justifications. To begin with, through advertising, managers intend to attract more customers and to compete with other related companies. Nowadays, the market is increasingly competitive and advertisement plays an important role in gaining a prosperous and profitable business. Hence, showing that your product is superior can attract more customers. A vivid example can be given to shed light on what was elaborated above. I remember an advertisement about a car, which was not a very big car, but some people in the car used to repeat this slogan repeatedly: " More room for your friends, more room for your family" . Although the car was not big at all, because of the repetition of that slogan, I started to believe that the car is actually big, and I was intrigued to buy the car. In summary, the car seemed better in the advertisement. Beside the above-mentioned reason, advertisement enables the businesspersons to create an image of quality for their products using tricky strategies. In the future, they can use this image to sell other products. For example, Sipa Corporation is one of the most well-known car manufacturers in Iran; and the success of this company, in my opinion, is entirely due to perfect advertising campaigns. By using celebrities in their advertisements, they created a picture of quality and luxury for their cars. In one of their advertisements, they used a famous race-car athlete to show how fast their cars are. Indeed, the car in that advertisement was not so fast; but people believed that the car was fast because the celebrity said, " I feel great in my fast car”. Consequently, the image of fast-car assisted the company to make substantial profit. Having discussed this issue from this point of view, I would rather look at it from another perspective. Some insightful people may oppose the statement since they can distinguish good and bad products using the internet and the reports from independent advertisement agencies. By using E-commerce websites, people can compare the products, read the reviews of each product, and then make their best choice. Moreover, reports from some agencies can provide us with true information about the products, which would be very useful in decision-making in purchasing expensive products. Therefore, companies prefer to give real information about their products in the advertisements. All in all, although some sophisticated people may oppose the statement, I still support that products, in the advertisements, are shown better than what they really are. Advertising is all about attracting more customers and making more money, the statement is in accordance to this general rule.
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Advertisements
comprise a major part of television programs and newspapers.
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Companies
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use
various
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advertisement
methods to inform the
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people
about their new
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products
and to compete with
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other
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companies
.
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Some
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people
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agree
that most
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advertisements
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make
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products
seem much better than they
really
are;
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some
others disagree. In my opinion, I approve the
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statement
and here are my justifications.

To
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begin
with, through advertising, managers intend to attract more customers and to compete with
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other
related
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companies
. Nowadays, the market is
increasingly
competitive and
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advertisement
plays an
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
role in gaining a prosperous and profitable business.
Hence
, showing that your
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product
is superior can attract more customers. A vivid example can be
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given
to shed light on what
was elaborated
above. I remember an
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advertisement
about a
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car
, which was not a
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very
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big
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car
,
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but
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some
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people
in the
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car
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used
to repeat this slogan
repeatedly
:
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&quot
; More room for your friends, more room for your
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family&quot
;
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.
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car
was not
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big
at all,
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because
of the repetition of that slogan, I
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started
to believe that the
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car
is actually
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big
, and I
was intrigued
to
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buy
the
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car
. In summary, the
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car
seemed better in the advertisement.

Beside the above-mentioned reason,
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advertisement
enables the businesspersons to create an image of quality for their
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products
using tricky strategies. In the future, they can
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use
this image to sell
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other
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products
.
For example
,
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Sipa
Corporation is one of the most well-known
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car
manufacturers in Iran; and the success of this
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company
, in my opinion, is
entirely
due to perfect advertising campaigns. By using celebrities in their
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advertisements
, they created a picture of quality and luxury for their
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cars
. In one of their
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advertisements
, they
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used
a
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famous
race-car athlete to
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show
how
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fast
their
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cars
are.
Indeed
, the
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car
in that
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advertisement
was not
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so
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fast
;
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but
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people
believed that the
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car
was
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fast
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because
the celebrity said,
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&quot
; I feel great in my
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fast
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car”
.
Consequently
, the image of
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fast
-car assisted the
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company
to
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make
substantial profit.

Having discussed this issue from this point of view, I would
rather
look at it from another perspective.
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Some
insightful
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people
may oppose the
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statement
since they can distinguish
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good
and
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bad
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products
using the internet and the reports from independent
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advertisement
agencies. By using E-commerce websites,
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people
can compare the
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products
, read the reviews of each
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product
, and then
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make
their best choice.
Moreover
, reports from
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some
agencies can provide us with true information about the
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products
, which would be
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very
useful in decision-making in purchasing expensive
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products
.
Therefore
,
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companies
prefer to give real information about their
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products
in the advertisements.

All in all, although
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some
sophisticated
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people
may oppose the
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statement
, I
still
support that
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products
, in the
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advertisements
,
are shown
better than what they
really
are. Advertising is all about attracting more customers and making more money, the
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statement
is in accordance to this general
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rule
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
60Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay TPO 17 – task 2: Most advertisements make products seem much better than they are. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
489 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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