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TPO-17 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most advertisements make products seem much better then they really are. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.1

TPO-17 - Independent Writing Task Most advertisements make products seem much better then they really are. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1
There is a common myth that large sporting international events cause problems for the organisers and it is not worth hosting such events. In this essay, we will try to explore what are the advantages and disadvantages of hosting such events, and base our opinion on whether this myth is true if the disadvantages outweigh the advantages. There are many problems associated with holding such events, the first and foremost is the costs associated with holding such events. The hosting country has to provide boarding and lodging facilities to the guest teams. Similarly, huge number of sporting fans also arrive to watch the event and this may require building new infrastructure such as hotels, roads etc. The influx of the large number of people creates many problems such as traffic problems for the locals, Law and order problems as we seen in recent football tournaments that fans of opposing teams fight with each other inside the stadiums as well as on the roads which creates chaos in the hosting city. The positive impacts or advantages includes a boost in tourism for the hosting country. This helps in bringing foreign exchange as people come from all over the world to attend these events, and they use local services such as hotels, transport and do shopping in the local markets and all of this creates a positive economic impact for the host nation. These events are also seen as a source of pride for the hosting nation and create interest in the youth towards sports. This brief comparison of the pros and cons of holding international sporting events suggests that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages and the myth that these events cause problems and these events are not worth hosting in not true. I strongly believe that these events should organise as they have a positive social and economic impact on the host country.
There is a common myth that large sporting international
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cause
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problems
for the
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organisers
and it is not worth
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hosting
such
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events
. In this essay, we will try to explore what are the advantages and disadvantages of
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hosting
such
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, and base our opinion on whether this myth is true if the disadvantages outweigh the advantages.

There are
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many
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problems
associated with holding such
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events
, the
first
and foremost is the costs associated with holding such
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events
. The
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hosting
country
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has to
provide boarding and lodging facilities to the guest teams.
Similarly
, huge number of sporting fans
also
arrive to
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watch
the
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event
and this may require building new infrastructure such as hotels, roads etc. The influx of the large number of
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people
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creates
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many
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problems
such as traffic
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problems
for the locals, Law and order
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problems
as we
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seen
in recent football tournaments that fans of opposing teams fight with each other inside the stadiums
as well
as on the roads which
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creates
chaos in the
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hosting
city.

The
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positive
impacts or advantages includes a boost in tourism for the
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country. This
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helps
in bringing foreign exchange as
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people
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come
from all over the world to attend these
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events
, and they
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use
local services such as hotels, transport and
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do shopping
in the local markets and all of this
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creates
a
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positive
economic impact for the host nation. These
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are
also
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seen
as a source of pride for the
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hosting
nation and
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create
interest in the youth towards sports.

This brief comparison of the pros and cons of holding international sporting
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events
suggests that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages and the myth that these
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events
cause
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problems
and these
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events
are not worth
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hosting
in not true. I
strongly
believe that these
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events
should
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organise
as they have a
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positive
social and economic impact on the host country.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay TPO-17 - Independent Writing Task Most advertisements make products seem much better then they really are. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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