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TPO 17 Question 4 Ritualization Sociobiologists believe that some communicative behavior in animals is developed through a process called ritualization In this process the purpose of a given behavior changes over time a behavior that originally had a prac v.1

TPO 17 Question 4 Ritualization Sociobiologists believe that some communicative behavior in animals is developed through a process called ritualization In this process the purpose of a given behavior changes over time a behavior that originally had a prac v. 1
An essential skill set many people have to equip and sharpen in every workplace is verbal interaction between employees and leaders, who often question whether it is truly as necessary as the other skills or not. On one hand, I am inclined to believe that as an individual work at a large-scale company, he absolutely has to cement the long-standing relationship among heads of departments. On the other hand, hardly can we deny that there is more and more practical knowledge and useful skills which virtually the whole staff or leaders forgot to update. To assess the essential advantages of friendly communication among members of the company, we must bring a boosted level of productivity into focus. Assuming a newbie was recruited at a multinational enterprise, he would be struggling to cope with the pressure from the unfamiliar working environment. In such a case, feeling sympathy from colleagues as well as acceptance from the seniors would be a therapeutic effect. Not only can an employee be supported whenever he is stuck with business problems, but some minor mistakes will also be averted. Another benefit of workplace communication is collecting and piecing together personal ideas and proposals from every single one, some of whom might be innovative even though they work in lower positions. Although so far, one can readily draw the conclusion that all companies must try to attain effective communication, we must put the crucial elements of other skills into perspective before judging if one deserves more attention than the rest. Not having a comprehensive vision or fearless mindset, even the most communicative manager will hit the brick wall and the company will make no progress or even fall behind. For instance, once a leader or even a worker is able to have the capability of solving problems and developing strategies, the business corporation will have so many chances to progress toward profitable gains. On top of that, the workplace culture, along with the ability to integrate technologíes into conventional business practices, will dramatically affect the survival of all startups in this digital era. Taking both sides into consideration, they point me to the conclusion that in principle, communicating is essential for the cooperation between managers and subordinates, but in practice, there are other factors at play. Quality such as innovation, risk-taking, and troubleshooting must be present among leaders in order to bring the businesses to another level.
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skill
set
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many
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people
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have to
equip and sharpen in every workplace is verbal interaction between employees and
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leaders
, who
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often
question whether it is
truly
as necessary as the
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other
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skills
or not. On one hand, I
am inclined
to believe that as an individual work at a large-scale
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company
, he
absolutely
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has to
cement the long-standing relationship among heads of departments. On the
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other
hand, hardly can we deny that there is more and more practical knowledge and useful
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skills
which
virtually
the whole staff or
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
leaders
forgot to update.

To assess the essential advantages of friendly communication among members of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
, we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
bring a boosted level of productivity into focus. Assuming a newbie
was recruited
at a multinational enterprise, he would be struggling to cope with the pressure from the unfamiliar working environment. In such a case, feeling sympathy from colleagues
as well
as acceptance from the seniors would be a therapeutic effect. Not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
can an employee
be supported
whenever he
is stuck
with
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business
problems,
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but
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some
minor mistakes will
also
be averted
. Another benefit of workplace communication is collecting and piecing together personal
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
and proposals from every single one,
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some
of whom might be innovative
even though
they work in lower positions.

Although
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so
far, one can
readily
draw the conclusion that all
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companies
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must
try to attain effective communication, we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
put the crucial elements of
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other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skills
into perspective
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before
judging if one deserves more attention than the rest. Not having a comprehensive vision or fearless mindset, even the most communicative manager will hit the brick wall and the
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company
will
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make
no progress or even fall behind.
For instance
, once a
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leader
or even a worker is able to have the capability of solving problems and developing strategies, the
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business
corporation will have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
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many
chances to progress toward profitable gains.
On top of that
, the workplace culture, along with the ability to integrate
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technologíes
into conventional
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
business
practices, will
dramatically
affect the survival of all startups in this digital era.

Taking both sides into consideration, they point me to the conclusion that in principle, communicating is essential for the cooperation between managers and subordinates,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
in practice, there are
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
factors at play. Quality such as innovation,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risk
-taking, and troubleshooting
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be present among
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
leaders
in order to bring the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
businesses
to another level.
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IELTS essay TPO 17 Question 4 Ritualization Sociobiologists believe that some communicative behavior in animals is developed through a process called ritualization In this process the purpose of a given behavior changes over time a behavior that originally had a prac v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
399 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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