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TPO27-6Using the examples from the lecture, explain two developments that Allow ancient Roman cities to expand. v.1

TPO27-6Using the examples from the lecture, explain two developments that Allow ancient Roman cities to expand. v. 1
The air and water pollution from industries and construction sites is becoming an issue in developing countries and declining the air and water quality. This can be prevented by introducing waste management plan along with proper sanitisation, and also educating people about the environmental hazards due to pollution from construction and factory waste. Firstly, the government should take measures to reduce the water pollution in developing countries by introducing proper rules and restrictions on construction companies and industries responsible for putting waste into the water bodies. In developing countries the concept of dump yards and disposal sites ought to be strictly imposed as it will reduce most of the burden. Furthermore, the Government ought to impose ban on factories and companies causing excessive smoke and pollution. More and more green belt areas should be introduced in cities and permissions for construction in these areas should be banned. However, environment friendly construction sites which use degenerative materials and have construction rules will limit environmental distress due to construction. One more measure which will lower the air pollution and improve air quality is planting more plants, even on the road sides and imposing tickets and charges that break the rule and eventually reducing traffic on the roads and improving public transport facilities. Authorities ought to focus more on renewable resources such as, solar panels and windmills for generating electricity and using that electricity for electric cars and buses and thus, reducing use of fossil fuels. In conclusion, by providing green belt areas in the cities and renewable energy resources is the solution to better environment which is free from air and water pollution in developing countries.
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and
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water
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pollution
from industries and
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construction
sites is becoming an issue in
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developing
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countries
and declining the
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air
and
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water
quality. This can be
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prevented
by introducing waste management plan along with proper
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sanitisation
, and
also
educating
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people
about the environmental hazards due to
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pollution
from
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construction
and factory waste.

Firstly
, the
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government
should take measures to
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reduce
the
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water
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pollution
in
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developing
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countries
by introducing proper
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rules
and restrictions on
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construction
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companies
and industries responsible for putting waste into the
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water
bodies. In
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developing
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countries
the concept of dump yards and disposal sites ought to be
strictly
imposed as it will
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reduce
most of the burden.

Furthermore
, the
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Government
ought to impose ban on factories and
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companies
causing excessive smoke and
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pollution
. More and more green belt areas should
be introduced
in cities and permissions for
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construction
in these areas should
be banned
.
However
, environment friendly
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construction
sites which
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use
degenerative materials and have
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construction
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rules
will limit environmental distress due to
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construction
. One more measure which will lower the
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air
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pollution
and
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improve
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air
quality is planting more plants, even on the road sides and imposing tickets and charges that break the
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rule
and
eventually
reducing traffic on the roads and improving public transport facilities. Authorities ought to focus more on renewable resources such as, solar panels and windmills for generating electricity and using that electricity for electric cars and buses and
thus
, reducing
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use
of fossil fuels.

In conclusion
, by providing green belt areas in the cities and renewable energy resources is the solution to better environment which is free from
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air
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
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pollution
in
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developing
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countries
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay TPO27-6Using the examples from the lecture, explain two developments that Allow ancient Roman cities to expand. v. 1

Essay
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4 paragraphs
274 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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