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TPO 16- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.4

TPO 16- The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 4
Today, there is a high tendency among people to take advantage of getting help from skilled people for their requirements. In fact, they realize that it is not necessary to learn all the knowledge and this brings about several benefits to our lives. When it comes to traveling, controversy surrounds the issue of whether people should choose to guide by a tour guide or they go by themselves? I am of the opinion that we need travel guides knowledge and there are several advantages which weigh the drawbacks, and the following explanations will further elaborate on this perspective. One of the remarkable aspects of the ongoing discussion which needs to be reflected is that traveling by tour guides can bring us convenience. As a matter of fact, travel agencies have educated all their tour guides with an abundant amount of information about the historical and geographical data about the places. Thus, they have deep understandings about the country you visit and can make you a great schedule of traveling. Moreover, getting help from the tour guide can make our time more efficient because they know how to deal with different problems and solve it in a less time. Take my last trip to Singapore for instance. I traveled with an intimate friend of mine to visit a whole environment of ancient Singapore, but we did not have enough information about the city rules, weather, and the reaction of the people towards foreigners. In the beginning, we were frightened because they were not hospitable. However, after talking to a tour guide, we perceived all their reactions and got a chance to see all the place well. Another noticeable aspect of the topic which demands a keen contemplation is that tour guides can provide us safe travel. Since most of the tour agencies have their vehicles and regular contacts, they can guarantee our safety and needs. In essence, the people who are traveling always are not aware of the difficulties of the visiting a foreign country and they cannot predict the upcoming happenings such as the crime rate, policies of the city, rules that should be obeyed. Therefore, a tour guide can keep us away from dangers and the possible problems. Paradoxically, there are some justifications by one who argues that travel agencies may exaggerate their expenses and deceive people by getting more money for some of their high-class facilities. It is not acceptable for tour companies to mistreat their customers and acquire money for the things that they are supposed to provide like their tour guides working hours which can vary for the individuals who pay less. Taken all the points above into consideration, I am pretty convinced that there are many reasons to support the idea of making travels which led by a tour guide. There are some benefits such as experiencing convenient travel and also having a safe trip. However, people should take into account this negative point that some travel agencies may treat unfairly by getting more money for some extra facilities.
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Today
, there is a high tendency among
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people
to take advantage of getting
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
from skilled
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people
for their requirements. In fact, they realize that it is not necessary to learn all the knowledge and this brings about several benefits to our
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lives
. When it
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comes
to traveling, controversy surrounds the issue of whether
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people
should choose to
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guide
by a
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tour
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guide or
they go by themselves? I am of the opinion that we need
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travel
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guides
knowledge and there are several advantages which weigh the drawbacks, and the following explanations will
further
elaborate on this perspective.

One of the remarkable aspects of the ongoing discussion which needs to
be reflected
is that traveling by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tour
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
guides
can bring us convenience. As a matter of fact,
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travel
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agencies
have educated all their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tour
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guides
with an abundant amount of information about the historical and geographical data about the places.
Thus
, they have deep understandings about the country you visit and can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
you a great schedule of traveling.
Moreover
, getting
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help
from the
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tour
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guide
can
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make
our time more efficient
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because
they know how to deal with
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different
problems and solve it in a less time. Take my last trip to Singapore
for instance
. I traveled with an intimate friend of mine to visit a whole environment of ancient Singapore,
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but
we did not have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
information about the city
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rules
, weather, and the reaction of the
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people
towards foreigners. In the beginning, we
were frightened
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because
they were not hospitable.
However
, after talking to a
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tour
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guide
, we perceived all their reactions and
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got
a chance to
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see
all the place well.

Another noticeable aspect of the topic which demands a keen contemplation is that
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tour
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guides
can provide us safe
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
travel
. Since most of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tour
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
agencies
have their vehicles and regular contacts, they can guarantee our safety and needs. In essence, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
who are traveling always are not aware of the difficulties of the visiting a foreign
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
country and
they cannot predict the upcoming happenings such as the crime rate, policies of the city,
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rules
that should
be obeyed
.
Therefore
, a
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tour
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guide
can
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keep
us away from
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dangers
and the possible problems.

Paradoxically
, there are
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some
justifications by one who argues that
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travel
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agencies
may exaggerate their expenses and deceive
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people
by getting more money for
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some
of their high-
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class
facilities. It is not acceptable for
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tour
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companies
to mistreat their customers and acquire money for the things that they
are supposed
to provide like their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tour
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
guides
working hours which can vary for the individuals who pay less.

Taken all the points above into consideration, I am pretty convinced that there are
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many
reasons to support the
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idea
of making
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travels
which led by a
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tour
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guide
. There are
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some
benefits such as experiencing convenient
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travel
and
also
having a safe trip.
However
,
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people
should take into account this
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negative
point that
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some
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travel
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agencies
may treat
unfairly
by getting more money for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
extra facilities.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
40Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay TPO 16- The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 4

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
504 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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