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Question: Some companies have uniforms for their staff which must be worn at all times. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your own opinion. v.2

Question: Some companies have uniforms for their staff which must be worn at all times. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your own opinion. v. 2
Wearing a uniform in the workplace is mandatory for the employees of a few organizations. This trend of uniform has both merits and demerits; however, I believe that this is an overall positive development. The obligation to wear a uniform every day can reduce the productivity of an employee. This means some workers do not want to wear the uniform that their companies require them to wear as the uniform might not suit their body shape. Therefore they might feel uneasy at work which in turn can hamper their performance at work. Additionally, seeing everyone in the same color or dress every day can make a company’s working atmosphere dull and boring. People may not feel energetic in such a monotonous space which can certainly affect the overall efficiency of an establishment. However, these drawbacks associated with the wearing of uniforms can be reduced to a great extent by allowing the employees to choose the uniform they want to wear. On the other hand, one of the many advantages of wearing a uniform is that it can save the money and time of employees. This is because they do not need to waste their time while choosing a different dress for their workplaces every day and they can save a huge amount of money by not purchasing too many items of clothing. Moreover, a uniform can promote the brand name and it can make the company widely known among the public. Increased brand recognition will certainly boost sales and revenue. In conclusion, although wearing the same uniform can be boring for employees, I believe that the time and cost savings associated with the uniform and the brand recognition it brings outweigh the drawbacks.
Wearing a
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uniform
in the workplace is mandatory for the
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employees
of a few organizations. This trend of
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uniform
has both merits and demerits;
however
, I believe that this is an
overall
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positive
development.

The obligation to wear a
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uniform
every day can
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reduce
the productivity of an
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employee
. This means
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some
workers do not want to wear the
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uniform
that their
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companies
require them to wear as the
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uniform
might not suit their body shape.
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Therefore
they might feel uneasy at work which in turn can hamper their performance at work.
Additionally
, seeing everyone in the same color or dress every day can
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make
a
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company
’s working atmosphere dull and boring.
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People
may not feel energetic in such a monotonous space which can
certainly
affect the
overall
efficiency of an establishment.
However
, these drawbacks associated with the wearing of
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uniforms
can be
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reduced
to a great extent by allowing the
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employees
to choose the
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uniform
they want to wear.

On the other hand
, one of the
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many
advantages of wearing a
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uniform
is that it can save the money and time of
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employees
. This is
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because
they do not need to waste their time while choosing a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
dress for their workplaces every
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day and
they can save a huge amount of money by not purchasing too
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many
items of clothing.
Moreover
, a
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uniform
can promote the brand name and it can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
widely
known among the public. Increased brand recognition will
certainly
boost sales and revenue.

In conclusion
, although wearing the same
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uniform
can be boring for
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employees
, I believe that the time and cost savings associated with the
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uniform
and the brand recognition it brings outweigh the drawbacks.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Question: Some companies have uniforms for their staff which must be worn at all times. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your own opinion. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
5.5
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