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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.104

The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 104
It is irrefutable fact that artist and scientist both have an influential impact on human life. It is believed by few that the artist has more importance in term of effectiveness in our lives Whereas others think scientist do. In my opinion, I strongly agree that various talents clearly have more profound impact rather than scientists. To begin with, Musicians, painters and writers reveal their work quite often while scientists rarely invent things. This is because scientists need a huge amount for their research, where other talents can easily start their work under affordable budget, so they frequently produce their art. Also, such talents touch human emotions through their artistic ways consequently, many people start relating their life situations with such work. For example, according to the survey report of world music association, almost people who listen to music are deeply connect to the lyrics which gives them a feeling of their own life experiences. This means such art is commonly appreciated by the major amount of the public as it is feasibly available. However, when a scientist invents anything it takes a long time to get these products into the market due to high checklist reasons. Another reason to be considered, ratio of artists and scientists is vice a versa because there are numerous artistic people around the world while scientist are really few in numbers. So definitely there is more likely chances that these creative talents affect human life with their work through paintings and books. Where they hold a compelling reason to touch lives as a tool to represent feeling that are influential with their stories or images. For instance, books are considered as an imperative source to attain knowledge and helpful in the daily lives, whereas expensive theories are informative yet not of immediate use to human life. Therefore, creative talents have more impact on people living. In conclusion, people may differ in their views, I firmly believe that creative people have more impact on our lives frequently while scientific research is not commonly beneficial.
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scientist
both have an influential
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impact
on
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human
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life
. It
is believed
by few that the artist has more importance in term of effectiveness in our
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lives
Whereas others
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think
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scientist
do. In my opinion, I
strongly
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agree
that various
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talents
clearly
have more profound
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impact
rather
than scientists.

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begin
with, Musicians, painters and writers reveal their
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work
quite
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often
while
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scientists
rarely invent things. This is
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because
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scientists
need a huge amount for their research, where other
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talents
can
easily
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start
their
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work
under affordable budget,
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so
they
frequently
produce their art.
Also
, such
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talents
touch
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human
emotions through their artistic ways
consequently
,
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many
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people
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start
relating their
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life
situations with such
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work
.
For example
, according to the survey report of world music association, almost
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people
who listen to music are
deeply
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connect
to the lyrics which gives them a feeling of their
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own
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life
experiences. This means such art is
commonly
appreciated by the major amount of the public as it is
feasibly
available.
However
, when a
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scientist
invents anything it takes a long time to
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get
these products into the market due to high checklist reasons.

Another reason to
be considered
, ratio of artists and
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scientists
is vice a versa
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because
there are numerous artistic
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people
around the world while
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scientist
are
really
few in numbers.
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So
definitely there is more likely chances that these creative
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talents
affect
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human
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life
with their
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work
through paintings and books. Where they hold a compelling reason to touch
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lives
as a tool to represent feeling that are influential with their stories or images.
For instance
, books
are considered
as an imperative source to attain knowledge and helpful in the daily
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lives
, whereas expensive theories are informative
yet
not of immediate
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use
to
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human
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life
.
Therefore
, creative
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talents
have more
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impact
on
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people
living.

In conclusion
,
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people
may differ in their views, I
firmly
believe that creative
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people
have more
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impact
on our
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lives
frequently
while scientific research is not
commonly
beneficial.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 104

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
339 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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