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You went on a trip and found that the guide was really helpful. Write a letter to the tour company manager. In your letter, you should: •describe the tour•tell what you liked about the tour guide•recommend manager ways/methods to appreciate the tour g v.1

You went on a trip and found that the guide was really helpful. Write a letter to the tour company manager. In your letter, you should: •describe the tour•tell what you liked about the tour guide•recommend manager ways/methods to appreciate the tour g v. 1
Some specialists are of the opinion that kids should start learning a foreign language at the elementary academy than when they are in high academy. In my opinion, the merits of this, is more significant than the demerits. This essay will highlight both the advantages and the disadvantages. There are two main advantages to learning a foreign language early in life. The first is the presence of a developing brain. At a young age, a child's brain is still developing; hence a child is able to learn languages faster as opposed to learning later in life. The second advantage is the absence of There are two main disadvantages to learn a foreign speech in during the early stage of a juvenile's life. The first is poor communication. Most time, the foreign speech being learnt is not the main dialect of communication used with the juvenile, resulting in learning multiple languages at the same time; consequently, the youngster might end up mixing up languages in a sentence leading to bad communication. For instance, when my sister was 3 years, she was learning Yoruba, English and French in school. Sometimes, she said vocabularies from these three languages in a sentence, resulting in mis-communication, which continued until she stopped learning one of the three languages. Furthermore, another disadvantage is jammed curriculum. The learning of a non-native language might lead to the academy’s curriculum of a child to be too tight such that the kid will be unable to engage in other activities such as afternoon siesta, game playing which is relevant as well. In conclusion, some specialists believe that children are better off learning a non-native dialect while in primary school than in secondary school. This essay discussed the advantages and the disadvantages.
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at the elementary academy than when they are in high academy. In my opinion, the merits of this, is more significant than the demerits. This essay will highlight both the
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advantages
and the disadvantages.

There are two main
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advantages
to
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learning
a
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foreign
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language
early in life. The
first
is the presence of a developing brain. At a young age, a child's brain is
still
developing;
hence
a child is able to learn
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languages
faster as opposed to
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learning
later in life. The second
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advantage
is the absence
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There are two main disadvantages to learn a
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foreign
speech in during the early stage of a juvenile's life. The
first
is poor communication. Most time, the
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foreign
speech being
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is not the main dialect of communication
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used
with the juvenile, resulting in
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multiple
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languages
at the same time;
consequently
, the youngster might
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up mixing up
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in a sentence leading to
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bad
communication.
For instance
, when my sister was 3 years, she was
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learning
Yoruba, English and French in school.
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Sometimes
, she said vocabularies from these three
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languages
in a sentence, resulting in
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mis-communication
, which continued until she
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stopped
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learning
one of the three
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languages
.
Furthermore
, another disadvantage
is jammed
curriculum. The
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learning
of a non-native
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language
might lead to the academy’s curriculum of a child to be too tight such that the kid will be unable to engage in other activities such as afternoon siesta, game playing which is relevant
as well
.

In conclusion
,
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some
specialists believe that children are better off
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learning
a non-native dialect while in primary school than in secondary school. This essay discussed the
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advantages
and the disadvantages.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay You went on a trip and found that the guide was really helpful. Write a letter to the tour company manager. In your letter, you should: •describe the tour•tell what you liked about the tour guide•recommend manager ways/methods to appreciate the tour g v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
290 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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