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TPO 11- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with? Use specific reason v.1

TPO 11- Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with? Use specific reason v. 1
Holidays is the right of every employee, however, adopting longer holidays approach by employers to boost productivity of employees will ensure outperforming in business. I agree with the given assertion on the basis of some compelling reasons. Long leaves should be considered as an integral part of the work life. Prolonged holidays are a good way to relieve the pains of the hectic lifestyles of workplaces. Since many employees suffer from work-related stress, which stems partly from ever-increasing workload, going away from the hung volume of tensions in work environments for a long time is likely to help workers block their worries out and start fresh. Then, not only does this lead to increase their productivity levels, but it also keeps them ahead at work. On the other hands, long-term vocations are likely to be helpful to achieve the work- life balance. To put it differently, staff can be able to spend more time focusing on their health, family and other interests which can lead to a happier life for them. For instance, there are 13 holidays at the beginning of the New Year in Iran country; nearly most of workplaces become close and employees can get the chance to enjoy their time as they please. It seems that these off days will make them more motivated for staring again work. So employers should consider that if they want to have more efficient employees, they should place as much importance in their work life of staff as their personal life. In conclusion, in my opinion, employers can keep their employees motivated to do their job well by giving long leaves which this has knock-effects on balancing their lives and gain more productivity.
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Holidays
is the right of every
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employee
,
however
, adopting longer
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holidays
approach by employers to boost productivity of
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employees
will ensure outperforming in business. I
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agree
with the
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given
assertion on the basis of
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some
compelling reasons.

Long
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leaves
should
be considered
as an integral part of the
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work
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life
. Prolonged
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holidays
are a
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good
way to relieve the pains of the hectic lifestyles of workplaces. Since
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many
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employees
suffer from work-related
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stress
, which stems partly from ever-increasing workload, going away from the hung volume of tensions in
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work
environments for a long time is likely to
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help
workers block their worries out and
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start
fresh. Then, not
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only
does this lead to increase their productivity levels,
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but
it
also
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keeps
them ahead at work.

On the other hands, long-term vocations are likely to be helpful to achieve the
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work-
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life
balance. To put it
differently
, staff can be able to spend more time focusing on their health, family and other interests which can lead to a happier
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life
for them.
For instance
, there are 13
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holidays
at the beginning of the New Year in Iran country;
nearly
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most of workplaces
become close and
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employees
can
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get
the chance to enjoy their time as they
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please
. It seems that these off days will
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make
them more motivated for staring again
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work
.
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So
employers should consider that if they want to have more efficient
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
employees
, they should place as much importance in their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
of staff as their personal life.

In conclusion
, in my opinion, employers can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
employees
motivated to do their job well by giving long
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leaves
which this has knock-effects on balancing their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
and gain more productivity.
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IELTS essay TPO 11- Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with? Use specific reason v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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