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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to so much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with? Hi, Please check my essa v.505

Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to so much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with? Hi, Please check my essa v. 505
Although many people believe that the overabundance of useless information through the internet can cause people to waste time, I do strongly disagree with this idea. In my opinion; people benefit from internet access and technology enormously because they can deepen their knowledge, become open minded, and communicate with each other more effectively. Doubtless, data and information are the most vital stuff for every student especially if he is studying at the university. Without internet access students won’t be able to solve most of their problems. An example from my own life may shed some light on this issue, I remember when I was undergraduate I had many problems learning computer programming. At that time I did not used to search for issues on a specific website. Surprisingly, by studying this course using some useful resources and information through the internet I learnt that course well. So it is obvious how internet may help students in different levels to raise their knowledge. One should always remember that in order to have a prosperous society; every individual has to do his best. Without access to the internet; people would not be able to read about the latest topics. This creates problem for a society as whole; they would become narrow-minded in a way that would avoid new ideas and could not adapt themselves to the new kinds of information and technologies. This is absolutely an obstacle for a society wishes to become progressive. Another side of the coin however is communications. People need to socialize with each other, and nowadays most of these socializing are being done through the internet actually through various communicating applications. Just imagine you do not have access to the internet for even a day; it seems very difficult not to beware of your friends, and families. If you are a student studying abroad this is the most valuable thing that internet technology provides for you which is very necessary. To put it in nut shell, internet websites are not always a source which provides useless information. Think about different situations each individual may make use of it properly. A university student having difficulties finding solutions to different problems, a student living abroad may use it to meet his family every day, an uncanny experience which was not practical in the past, and everyone in the society benefits it by hearing about latest news, also up to date technologies. So does not seem that living without internet access makes us lots of troubles and disturb our life?
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people
believe that the overabundance of useless
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information
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through
the internet can cause
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people
to waste time, I do
strongly
disagree with this
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idea
. In my opinion;
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people
benefit from internet
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access
and
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technology
enormously
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because
they can deepen their knowledge, become
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open minded
, and communicate with each other more
effectively
.

Doubtless, data and
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information
are the most vital stuff for every
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student
especially
if he is studying at the university. Without internet
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access
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students
won’t be able to solve most of their
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problems
. An example from my
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own
life may shed
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some
light on this issue, I remember when I was undergraduate I had
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many
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problems
learning computer programming. At that time I did not
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used
to search for issues on a specific website.
Surprisingly
, by studying this course using
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some
useful resources and
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information
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through
the internet I
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learnt
that course well.
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it is obvious how internet may
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help
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students
in
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different
levels to raise their knowledge.

One should always remember that in order to have a prosperous
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society
; every individual
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has to
do his best. Without
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access
to the internet;
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people
would not be able to read about the latest topics. This creates
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problem
for a
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society
as whole; they would become narrow-minded in a way that would avoid new
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ideas
and could not adapt themselves to the new kinds of
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information
and
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technologies
. This is
absolutely
an obstacle for a
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society
wishes to become progressive.

Another side of the coin
however
is communications.
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People
need to socialize with each other, and nowadays most of these socializing are
being done
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through
the internet actually
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through
various communicating applications.
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Just
imagine you do not have
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access
to the internet for even a day; it seems
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very
difficult not to beware of your friends, and families. If you are a
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student
studying abroad this is the most valuable thing that internet
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technology
provides for you which is
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very
necessary.

To put it in
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nut
shell, internet websites are not always a source which provides useless
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information
.
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about
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different
situations each individual may
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make
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use
of it
properly
. A university
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student
having difficulties finding solutions to
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different
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problems
, a
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student
living abroad may
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use
it to
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meet
his family every day, an uncanny experience which was not practical in the past, and everyone in the
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society
benefits it by hearing about
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latest
news,
also
up to date
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technologies
.
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So
does not seem that living without internet
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access
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makes
us lots of troubles and disturb our life?
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37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to so much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with? Hi, Please check my essa v. 505

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
420 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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