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Sports and social activities are just important as classes and library should receive equal financial support. Agree or Disagree? v.1

Sports and social activities are just important as classes and library should receive equal financial support. Agree or Disagree? v. 1
A child's code of conduct in the school is as equally important as his learning. The unacceptable and bad attitudes among children nowadays has become a major concern for most schools. This essay would highlight the possible causes of these illicit behaviours as well as provide solutions to address them. To begin, one major reason why students behave poorly at school is that they are being neglected and given insufficient attention at home. With the increasing pressure on parents to provide and cater for the family, many of our wards are no longer given enough care nor taught good morals at home. This has resulted to most children learning from their fellow peers, who in most cases are also not properly trained. Also, there has been a significant decline in the rate at which high schoolers are being punished both at school and their various homes. Some punishments and disciplinary actions such as flogging, kneeling down and manual labour which were given to ill behaved students in the past are no longer used as a form of correction and discipline. For example, teachers are no longer allowed to flog students when they behave badly in most Nigerian schools because of the fear of their parents getting overly displeased with such manner of correction. One way to solve this problem is for the teachers to be allowed the freedom of correcting children who have misbehaved, without any restriction. This would ensure cooperation and acceptable conduct in the school premises. Similarly, parents and guardians should endeavour to give their wards enough attention at home, provide their daily needs accordingly as well as inculcate good morals in them. To buttress this, recent studies done has proven that if a child is catered for adequately at home, he would be well behaved. In conclusion, bad behaviour among students have become a challenge for many schools nowadays. Parents as well as teachers should put in their very best to ensure proper behaviour among children in the learning environment.
A child's code of conduct in the
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school
is as
equally
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important
as his learning. The unacceptable and
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bad
attitudes among
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children
nowadays has become a major concern for most
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schools
. This essay would highlight the possible causes of these illicit
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behaviours
as
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well
as provide solutions to address them.

To
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begin
, one major reason why
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students
behave
poorly
at
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school
is that they are
being neglected
and
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given
insufficient attention at home. With the increasing pressure on
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parents
to provide and cater for the family,
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many
of our wards are no longer
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given
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enough
care nor taught
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good
morals at home. This has resulted to most
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children
learning from their fellow peers, who
in most cases
are
also
not
properly
trained.
Also
, there has been a significant decline in the rate at which high schoolers are
being punished
both at
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school
and their various
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homes
.
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Some
punishments and disciplinary actions such as flogging, kneeling down and manual
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labour
which were
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given
to
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ill behaved
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students
in the past are no longer
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used
as a form of correction and discipline.
For example
, teachers are no longer
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allowed
to flog
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students
when they behave
badly
in most Nigerian
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schools
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because
of the fear of their
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parents
getting
overly
displeased with such manner of correction.

One way to solve this problem is for the teachers to be
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allowed
the freedom of correcting
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children
who have misbehaved, without any restriction. This would ensure cooperation and acceptable conduct in the
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school
premises.
Similarly
,
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parents
and guardians should
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endeavour
to give their wards
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enough
attention at home, provide their daily needs
accordingly
as
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well
as inculcate
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good
morals in them. To buttress this, recent studies done has proven that if a child
is catered
for
adequately
at home, he would be
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well behaved
.

In conclusion
,
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bad
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behaviour
among
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students
have become a challenge for
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many
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schools
nowadays.
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Parents
as
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well
as teachers should put in their
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very
best to ensure proper
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behaviour
among
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children
in the learning environment.
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IELTS essay Sports and social activities are just important as classes and library should receive equal financial support. Agree or Disagree? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
333 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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