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Some people say that childhood is the best time in a person's life. Other people disagree. What is your opinion? Explain why. v.1

Some people say that childhood is the best time in a person's life. Other people disagree. What is your opinion? Explain why. v. 1
We’ve always heard the expression “do what you love and everything else will follow”, to what extent is this true? In a rapidly developing country like England, is gaining a high salary more important than being happy with one’s job? In my opinion, I disagree with the statement that earning a high income is more important than being satisfied with one’s job, as money follows job satisfaction. Happiness is part of life and any person strives to gain it. While earning a high salary may make some people happy short term, it isn’t lasting nor sustainable as it doesn’t lead to happiness. Happiness is gained when one is satisfied with his or her job. For example. As an undergraduate medical student, It is critical for me to be happy with what I do so I can be more willing to help my patients. If I was concerned with money, I may not be concerned with the care of my patients. On the other hand, I may not necessarily find a job that I am passionate about due to my circumstances such as lack of money, education etc. This may force me to be stuck in a job that I do not like. For example, as a child, I may have been passionate about being a doctor, however, due to circumstances I may have just settled with working in a restaurant where I am not happy leading me to chase after a big salary instead. In conclusion, while earning a living is important, job satisfaction leads to more success
We’ve always heard the expression “do what you
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love
and everything else will follow”, to what extent is this true? In a
rapidly
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developing country
like England, is gaining a high salary more
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important
than being
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happy
with one’s
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job
? In my opinion, I disagree with the statement that earning a high income is more
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important
than
being satisfied
with one’s
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job
, as money follows
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job
satisfaction.

Happiness is part of life and any person strives to gain it. While earning a high salary may
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make
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some
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people
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happy
short term, it isn’t lasting nor sustainable as it doesn’t lead to happiness. Happiness
is gained
when one
is satisfied
with
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his or her
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job
.
For example
. As an undergraduate medical student, It is critical for me to be
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happy
with what I do
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so
I can be more willing to
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help
my patients. If I
was concerned
with money, I may not
be concerned
with the care of my patients.

On the other hand
, I may not
necessarily
find a
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job
that I am passionate about due to my circumstances such as lack of money, education etc. This may force me to
be stuck
in a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
that I do not like.
For example
, as a child, I may have been passionate about being a doctor,
however
, due to circumstances I may have
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just
settled with working in a restaurant where I am not
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happy
leading me to chase after a
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big
salary
instead
.

In conclusion
, while earning a living is
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important
,
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job
satisfaction leads to more success
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IELTS essay Some people say that childhood is the best time in a person's life. Other people disagree. What is your opinion? Explain why. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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