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TPO 10 - Question 1Talk about a time when you accomplished something you did not think you could do. What do you accomplish? Why did you think you could not do it? v.1

TPO 10 - Question 1Talk about a time when you accomplished something you did not think you could do. What do you accomplish? Why did you think you could not do it? v. 1
In the contemporary world, it is common belief that to reduce the amount of traffic jam in many cities, it is necessary to use public transportation services instead of excessive use of personal cars. Although, I agree that the frequency and security of public transportation is lesser than private cars, personally, I strongly believe that public transportation can be useful to save money because of lesser cost, safety and reliable transport which results lesser traffic jams in cities. In the following essay, I will discuss this issue using some examples to support my views and demonstrate points. First of all, convincing argument can be made that the higher the usage of public transport instead of personal vehicles leads lesser the traffic jams in cities. To begin with, due to lesser usage of personal cars, it helps to reduce the amount of pollution caused by vehicles. In other words, the less consumption of fuel for excessive use of private cars saves the environment from being polluted and gives healthier life to people; therefore, the usage of public transportation must be increased. The second reason for my belief is that, public transportation services are more reliable and secure to commute than personal cars. For instance, public transport is affiliated by government, which ultimately gives high priority to their commuters in many ways. Additionally, more usage of public transportation and lesser the usage of private cars helps humans to build a healthier life. For example, if the traffic jam is less, then people start using their bicycle and that is helpful to maintain their health as well as the environment. If these scenarios have merit, then the conclusion drawn in the original argument is significantly strengthened. On the other hand, some arguments can be made that the public transportation service is poor in many cities which insist them to use private cars. The main reason for this is one reason that will support the other side. However, closer examination would reveal that if the frequency of public transportation is increased with good quality of service, then people need not to use their personal cars to commute. Apart from this, further analysis would make it clear that increasing the use of public transportation gives beneficial results in many ways. To sum up, although there are some benefits of private cars, the advantages of public transportation surely outweighs its disadvantages. Having considered all the argument above, I would concede that public transportation gives beneficial results in many ways including lesser the traffic jams in cities.
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reduce
the amount of
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traffic
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cities
, it is necessary to
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use
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public
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services
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use
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cars
. Although, I
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agree
that the frequency and security of
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public
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transportation
is
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lesser
than
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private
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cars
,
personally
, I
strongly
believe that
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public
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transportation
can be useful to save money
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because
of
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lesser
cost, safety and reliable transport which results
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traffic
jams in
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. In the following essay, I will discuss this issue using
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some
examples to support my views and demonstrate points.

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First of all
, convincing
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argument
can
be made
that the higher the
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usage
of
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public
transport
instead
of
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personal
vehicles leads
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lesser
the
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traffic
jams in
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cities
. To
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begin
with, due to
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lesser
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usage
of
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personal
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cars
, it
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helps
to
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reduce
the amount of pollution caused by vehicles.
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, the less consumption of fuel for excessive
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use
of
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private
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cars
saves the environment from
being polluted
and
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gives
healthier life to
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people
;
therefore
, the
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usage
of
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transportation
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must
be increased
. The second reason for my belief is that,
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public
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transportation
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services
are more reliable and secure to commute than
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personal
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cars
.
For instance
,
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public
transport
is affiliated
by
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government
, which
ultimately
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gives
high priority to their commuters in
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many
ways.
Additionally
, more
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usage
of
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public
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transportation
and
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the
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usage
of
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private
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cars
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helps
humans to build a healthier life.
For example
, if the
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traffic
jam is less, then
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people
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start
using their bicycle and
that is
helpful to maintain their health
as well
as the environment. If these scenarios have merit, then the conclusion drawn in the original
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argument
is
significantly
strengthened.

On the other hand
,
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arguments
can
be made
that the
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public
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transportation
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service
is poor in
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many
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cities
which insist them to
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use
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private
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. The main reason for this is one reason that will support the other side.
However
, closer examination would reveal that if the frequency of
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public
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transportation
is increased
with
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good
quality of
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, then
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people
need not to
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gives
beneficial results in
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ways.

To sum up, although there are
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some
benefits of
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, the advantages of
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public
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surely
outweighs its disadvantages. Having considered all the
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argument
above, I would concede that
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public
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transportation
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gives
beneficial results in
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many
ways including
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the
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jams in
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.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay TPO 10 - Question 1Talk about a time when you accomplished something you did not think you could do. What do you accomplish? Why did you think you could not do it? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
420 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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