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TPO10-Q1: Talk about a time when you accomplished something you did not think you could do. What did you accomplish? Why did you think you could not do it? v.1

TPO10-Q1: Talk about a time when you accomplished something you did not think you could do. What did you accomplish? Why did you think you could not do it? v. 1
While it is sometimes believed that working from home affords and their families some benefits, others, however, are of the opinion that it would be stressful to the home. In my opinion, I consider that working from home presents important benefits that would impact positively on the quality of life of workers and their families. On the one hand, some people believe that working from home brings important benefits that would impact positively on the quality of life of workers and their families and I agree. In other words, working from home offers workers more time for themselves and their families and therefore, are able to apply themselves to family activities such as school runs and family playtime. In addition, having more time would enable workers pursue other interests and as a result, are able to get extra jobs that would present more income for the family. Furthermore, being able to work in a more relaxed mood relieves workers of both physical and mental stress, and as a result, enhances the quality of life they live. On the other hand, it is often thought that working from home would be stressful to the home. For instance, the home office does not have a definite space and so encroaches into the family space. Consequently, this would lead to work interruptions by family members, and therefore, causes distraction to the worker. Another outcome is that it could lead to conflict in the home that would impact in a negative sense on members of the family. In conclusion, while there are varying views regarding working from home, I believe that it brings important benefits whose outcome is, better quality of life for workers and their families.
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believed that
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working
from home affords and their
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families
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some
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benefits
, others,
however
, are of the opinion that it would be stressful to the home. In my opinion, I consider that
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working
from home presents
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important
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benefits
that would impact
positively
on the
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quality
of
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life
of
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workers
and their families.

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some
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people
believe that
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working
from home brings
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important
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benefits
that would impact
positively
on the
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quality
of
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life
of
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workers
and their
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families
and I
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agree
. In
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other
words,
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working
from home offers
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workers
more time for themselves and their
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families
and
therefore
, are able to apply themselves to
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family
activities such as school runs and
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family
playtime.
In addition
, having more time would enable
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workers
pursue
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other
interests and
as a result
, are able to
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get
extra jobs that would present more income for the
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family
.
Furthermore
, being able to work in a more relaxed mood relieves
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workers
of both physical and mental
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stress
, and
as a result
, enhances the
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quality
of
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life
they
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live
.

On the
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other
hand, it is
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often
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thought
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working
from home would be stressful to the home.
For instance
, the home office does not have a
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definite
space and
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so
encroaches into the
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family
space.
Consequently
, this would lead to work interruptions by
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family
members, and
therefore
, causes distraction to the
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worker
. Another outcome is that it could lead to conflict in the home that would impact in a
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negative
sense on members of the family.

In conclusion
, while there are varying views regarding
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working
from home, I believe that it brings
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important
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benefits
whose outcome is, better
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quality
of
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life
for
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workers
and their
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families
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay TPO10-Q1: Talk about a time when you accomplished something you did not think you could do. What did you accomplish? Why did you think you could not do it? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • Meet the criteria
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