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talk about a time you accomplished something you did not think you could do. what did you accomplish? why did you thing you could not do it. v.1

talk about a time you accomplished something you did not think you could do. what did you accomplish? why did you thing you could not do it. v. 1
With the advent of urbanization, the transportation system, across the globe has completely transformed. Owing to this, the aeroplanes are frequently used for import and export of edibles such as fruits and vegetables to the countries who are facing scarcity of them or unfavourable conditions to grow them. While some argue that this is not the optimal use of such resources, I strongly believe that it is a great thing to do. Some people think that air transport should be used for indispensable uses only. As the cost of aeroplane fuel is exorbitantly expensive, countries should not be using it for transporting less important goods. It should be used only for transporting major goods and alternatively, food items should be transported through other inexpensive ways of transportation such as, railways and via ships. For instance, it should be used to send official documents of the country or should be used by people who are paying to use that mode. On the contrary, I think that as most of the food items are perishable, it is crucial to send them via fastest mode of transport. Consequently, the public could purchase fresh fruits and vegetables. Conversely, if other modes of transport would be used, the risk of items getting rotten would be increased and no one wants to buy stale items. As a result, a lot of food items would be wasted each year. For example, countries who sent food items via aeroplane are able the feed more people than those who use other modes of transport for exporting purposes. In conclusion, as many people think that aeroplanes should not be used to transport food items to other countries as its fuel cost is very high and hence should only be used for inevitable purposes, I believe that air transport should be used as it is fast due to which freshness of perishable items could be retained.
With the advent of urbanization, the transportation system, across the globe has completely transformed. Owing to this, the
Possible spelling mistake. 'aeroplanes' is British English.
aeroplanes
are
frequently
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used
for import and export of edibles such as fruits and vegetables to the
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countries
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who
are facing scarcity of them or
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unfavourable
conditions to grow them. While
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some
argue that this is not the optimal
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use
of such resources, I
strongly
believe that it is a great thing to do.

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Some
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people
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think
that air
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transport
should be
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used
for indispensable
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uses
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only
. As the cost of
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aeroplane
fuel is
exorbitantly
expensive,
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countries
should not be using it for transporting less
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important
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goods
. It should be
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used
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only
for transporting major
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goods
and
alternatively
,
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food
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items
should
be transported
through
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other
inexpensive ways of transportation such as, railways and via ships.
For instance
, it should be
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used
to
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send
official documents of the
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country
or should be
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used
by
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people
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who
are paying to
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use
that mode.

On the contrary
, I
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think
that as most of the
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food
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items
are perishable, it is crucial to
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send
them via
A determiner is probably missing here: "the fastest".
fastest
mode of
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transport
.
Consequently
, the public could
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purchase
fresh fruits and vegetables.
Conversely
, if
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other
modes of
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transport
would be
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used
, the
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risk
of
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items
getting rotten would
be increased
and no one wants to
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buy
stale
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items
.
As a result
,
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a lot of
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food
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items
would
be wasted
each year.
For example
,
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countries
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who
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sent
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food
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items
via
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aeroplane
are able the feed more
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people
than those
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who
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use
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other
modes of
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transport
for exporting purposes.

In conclusion
, as
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many
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people
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think
that
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aeroplanes
should not be
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used
to
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transport
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
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items
to
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other
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countries
as its fuel cost is
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very
high and
hence
should
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only
be
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used
for inevitable purposes, I believe that air
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transport
should be
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used
as it is
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fast
due to which freshness of perishable
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items
could
be retained
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay talk about a time you accomplished something you did not think you could do. what did you accomplish? why did you thing you could not do it. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
315 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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