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Do you agree or disagree with the following statements. Teachers should not make their social or political views know to the students in the classroom. v.3

Teachers should not make their social or political views know to the students in the classroom. v. 3
It becomes a very common trend for young adults to move to urban areas to be admitted to well renowned universities and to look for better working opportunities. This essay will discuss its causes and the benefits and demerits of this development. Personally, I believe that its negative sides supersedes the advantages. Firstly, one of the reasons why people prefer to live in cities is because they find it harder to have promising career and to advance in their position while working in the rural areas. Most jobs in villages offer limited benefits, wage increase and personal trainings and development. For example, in the Philippines, salaries are relatively lower in provinces as compared to what the minimum wage employee can earn. Secondly, as people foresee that there is lack of employment opportunities in their hometown, and universities and colleges from where applicants graduated had become a contributing factor to be selected in top companies, they had to study to these better colleges which offer competent educational curriculum and facilities which are mostly available in cities only. One of the advantages of this is people become to learn to live independently as they no longer have their parents to sustain their daily needs and offer minor decisions in their routines. In addition to that, experiences and learnings that cities can offer are undoubtedly helpful for one’s personal development. With past-faced and changing environment and differences among people to deal with in the cities can definitely lead to improve one’s adaptability and growth. On the other hand, as more people try to relocate in urban areas, increase in traffic congestion and pollution, which are now considered as city problems that are extremely difficult to resolve. More time is being wasted on the roads instead of using it as quality time for the family or to be more productive. Furthermore, as people try to move out of their hometowns, these places become under-develop because of lack of skills and workforce. It hampers the growth of these communities as investors and entrepreneurs would still prefer to build their business in cities as they find that they will become more successful in areas with more people living around. Hence, these would result to slow progress of the nation as there is no equal distribution of opportunities for growth among different areas of the country. In conclusion, the downside of this trend has become more evident as today’s generation is already facing the negative impact it has caused among the people and for the country, which overall outweighs the benefits.
It
becomes
a
very
common trend for young adults to
move
to urban
areas
to
be admitted
to well renowned universities and to look for better working opportunities. This essay will discuss its causes and the benefits and demerits of this development.
Personally
, I believe that its
negative
sides supersedes the advantages.

Firstly
, one of the reasons why
people
prefer to
live
in
cities
is
because
they find it harder to have promising career and to advance in their position while working in the rural
areas
. Most jobs in villages
offer
limited benefits, wage increase and personal trainings and development.
For example
, in the Philippines, salaries are
relatively
lower in provinces as compared to what the minimum wage employee can earn.
Secondly
, as
people
foresee that there is lack of employment opportunities in their hometown, and universities and colleges from where applicants graduated had
become
a contributing factor to
be selected
in top
companies
, they had to study to these better colleges which
offer
competent educational curriculum and facilities which are
mostly
available in
cities
only
.

One of the advantages of this is
people
become
to learn to
live
independently
as they no longer have their parents to sustain their daily needs and
offer
minor decisions in their routines.
In addition
to that, experiences and learnings that
cities
can
offer
are
undoubtedly
helpful for one’s personal development. With past-faced and changing environment and differences among
people
to deal with in the
cities
can definitely lead to
improve
one’s adaptability and growth.

On the other hand
, as more
people
try to relocate in urban
areas
, increase in traffic congestion and pollution, which are
now
considered as city problems that are
extremely
difficult to resolve. More time is
being wasted
on the roads
instead
of using it as quality time for the family or to be more productive.
Furthermore
, as
people
try to
move
out of their hometowns, these places
become
under-develop
because
of lack of
skills
and workforce. It hampers the growth of these communities as investors and entrepreneurs would
still
prefer to build their business in
cities
as they find that they will
become
more successful in
areas
with more
people
living around.
Hence
, these would result to slow progress of the nation as there is no equal distribution of opportunities for growth among
different
areas
of the country.

In conclusion
, the downside of this trend has
become
more evident as
today
’s generation is already facing the
negative
impact it has caused among the
people
and for the country, which
overall
outweighs the benefits.
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IELTS essay Teachers should not make their social or political views know to the students in the classroom. v. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
424 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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