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TPO 06 - Question 1Talk about a photograph or painting you have seen that was memorable. Explain what you liked or disliked about it. v.1

TPO 06 - Question 1Talk about a photograph or painting you have seen that was memorable. Explain what you liked or disliked about it. v. 1
In the recent times, there has been a huge advancement in the area of science which has helped us know about healthy and unhealthy habits. However, a lot of people ignore the health warning and continue to engage in unhealthy activities. In my essay I will talk about the causes of this behaviour and then will highlight, the steps which should be taken to improve it. There are various unhealthy activities that people continue to engage in. Nowadays, people live a busy lifestyle and have lack of time. This is one of the main reasons why, people have started eating junk food as, this saves them time involved in cooking a meal. Furthermore, most of the people live a sedentary lifestyle. A number of people do not do any physical activity and their intake of junk food is also high. Therefore, this leads to various health problems such as obesity, high cholesterol etc. In addition, in order to cope with the pressure of work life, a number of people get addicted to tobacco, drugs and alcohol, which are detrimental to their well-being. Due to the addiction, people have developed, they consume these products regularly, in spite of being aware of the adverse effects caused to their well-being. They become very habitual towards these products. On the other hand, government can take some measures, which can encourage healthy living among people. To start with, the government can levy higher taxes on junk food, tobacco and alcohol, which can reduce the consumption of these products. Secondly, the government can provide more education and also, conduct awareness programs on the adverse effects of consumption of these unhealthy products.
In the recent times, there has been a huge advancement in the area of science which has
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helped
us know about healthy and
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unhealthy
habits.
However
,
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a lot of
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people
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ignore
the health warning and continue to engage in
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unhealthy
activities. In my essay I will talk about the causes of this
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behaviour
and then will highlight, the steps which should
be taken
to
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improve
it.

There are various
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unhealthy
activities that
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people
continue to engage in. Nowadays,
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people
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live
a busy lifestyle and have lack of time. This is one of the main reasons why,
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people
have
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started
eating junk food as, this saves them time involved in cooking a meal.
Furthermore
, most of the
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
a sedentary lifestyle. A number of
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people
do not do any physical activity and their intake of junk food is
also
high.
Therefore
, this leads to various health problems such as obesity, high cholesterol etc.

In addition
, in order to cope with the pressure of work life, a number of
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people
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get
addicted to tobacco, drugs and alcohol, which are detrimental to their well-being. Due to the addiction,
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people
have developed, they consume these products
regularly
,
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in spite of
being aware of the adverse effects caused to their well-being. They become
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very
habitual towards these products.

On the other hand
,
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government
can take
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some
measures, which can encourage healthy living among
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people
. To
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start
with, the
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government
can levy higher taxes on junk food, tobacco and alcohol, which can
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reduce
the consumption of these products.
Secondly
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
can provide more education and
also
, conduct awareness programs on the adverse effects of consumption of these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
unhealthy
products.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay TPO 06 - Question 1Talk about a photograph or painting you have seen that was memorable. Explain what you liked or disliked about it. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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