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People who have original ideas are of much greater value to society than those who are simply able to copy the ideas of others well. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.1

People who have original ideas are of much greater value to society than those who are simply able to copy the ideas of others well. with this statement? v. 1
Traditional way of learning with the usage of printed books is increasingly being replaced with newer modalities, with the advancement of scientific inventions. While there are obvious advantages with this transition such as the easier accessibility to information, there are also certain downfalls. Both the sides will be discussed further, in this essay. Replacing books with computers and CD-Drives can help access information, a lot quicker. In other words, it avoids the cumbersome process of looking through several pages for a specific information. Specific data can be grouped in specific folders, which can be accessed easily. To illustrate, according to a recent study published by the American Psychiatrists Association (APA), 34% of students claimed that usage of laptops and tablets rather than several volumes of massive text books cut down their actual study time, by a half. On the other hand, the involvement of technology in learning can also have detrimental effects on the students. This is because, there are greater opportunities for an individual to get distracted, which is not the scenario with the usage of books. Newer modalities are considered to reduce a person's competence to focus for a longer period. For example, the threshold for concentration in current times, is considerably lower than that in the past. This could be attributed to more and more people preferring to use their gadgets as study materials. In conclusion, schools opting for screens rather than books can be advantageous for a student to find specific information swiftly, but there is also a great risk of causing distractions. However, schools should develop better policies to reduce the disadvantages and have a positive influence
Traditional way of learning with the usage of printed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
is
increasingly
being replaced
with newer modalities, with the advancement of scientific inventions. While there are obvious advantages with this transition such as the easier accessibility to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
, there are
also
certain downfalls. Both the sides will
be discussed
further
, in this essay.

Replacing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
with computers and CD-Drives can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
access
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
, a lot quicker.
In other words
, it avoids the cumbersome process of looking through several pages for a
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specific
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
.
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Specific
data can
be grouped
in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
specific
folders, which can
be accessed
easily
. To illustrate, according to a recent study published by the American Psychiatrists Association (APA), 34% of students claimed that usage of laptops and tablets
rather
than several volumes of massive text
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cut
down their actual study time, by a half.

On the other hand
, the involvement of technology in learning can
also
have detrimental effects on the students. This is
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because
, there are greater opportunities for an individual to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
distracted, which is not the scenario with the usage of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
. Newer modalities
are considered
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
a person's competence to focus for a longer period.
For example
, the threshold for concentration in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
times, is
considerably
lower than that in the past. This could
be attributed
to more and more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
preferring to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
their gadgets as study materials.

In conclusion
, schools opting for screens
rather
than
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
can be advantageous for a student to find
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
specific
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
swiftly
,
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but
there is
also
a great
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risk
of causing distractions.
However
, schools should develop better policies to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the disadvantages and have a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
influence
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay People who have original ideas are of much greater value to society than those who are simply able to copy the ideas of others well. with this statement? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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