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TPO-05 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do. Use specific reasons and examples to suppor v.1

TPO-05 - Independent Writing Task People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do. Use specific reasons and examples to suppor v. 1
Railways are cheapest and easiest form of transportation for people. Therefore, some citizens of many countries believe that officials should build new rail lines and they should spend more fund on creating new tracks. While, the opposition says that the old public shipment must be updated and budget should be higher for that purpose. I will discuss both views and will give my own opinion. Few people of different countries rely on building new track lines to link cities for the fastest train voyage and they suggest that more income must be fixed for this purpose. They think as because old tracks have expired now and new railway paths are necessary for the fastest journey. Therefore, more wealth is required for the setup of new lines among the urban areas. In my view, wage is essential for such projects. For the favour of public, governments should spend huge amount of money on increasing new railway tracks. For example, Europe is a big model in this regard and European countries built new railroads and by doing this they improved public carry. Few human consensus that wealth should spend on updating the old way of transport. They think as because there are large journey facilities are already available in the cities for travelling or transport. So, there is no need to create new track paths and money must be saved and should spend on previous way of shipping. In my observation, earlier means of transport are outdated now and they do not fulfil the requirements of today's world. Previous railway tracks are expired now, therefore, large money spending is important for new lines. As an example, we can see first world countries are focusing on new railway tracks and underground railway projects, which are beneficial for public transportation without ant disturbance. In conclusion, old lines are useless now and no need of money for such projects. New railway paths must be created and more money must be fixed for such plans.
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Railways
are cheapest and easiest form of transportation for
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people
.
Therefore
,
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some
citizens of
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many
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countries
believe that officials should build
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new
rail
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lines and
they should
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spend
more fund on creating
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new
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tracks
. While, the opposition says that the
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old
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public
shipment
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must
be updated
and budget should be higher for that purpose. I will discuss both views and will give my
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own
opinion.

Few
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people
of
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different
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countries
rely on building
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new
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track
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lines
to link cities for the fastest train
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voyage and
they suggest that more income
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must
be
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fixed
for this purpose. They
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think
as
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because
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old
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tracks
have expired
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now
and
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new
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railway
paths are necessary for the fastest journey.
Therefore
, more wealth
is required
for the setup of
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new
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lines
among the urban areas. In my view, wage is essential for such projects. For the
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favour
of
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public
,
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governments
should
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spend
huge amount of
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money
on increasing
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new
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railway
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tracks
.
For example
, Europe is a
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big
model in this regard and European
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countries
built
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new
railroads and by doing this they
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improved
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public
carry.

Few human consensus that wealth should
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spend
on updating the
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old
way of transport. They
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think
as
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because
there are large journey facilities are already available in the cities for travelling or transport.
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So
, there is no need to create
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new
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track
paths and
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money
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must
be saved
and should
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spend
on previous way of shipping. In my observation, earlier means of transport
are outdated
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now and
they do not fulfil the requirements of
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today
's world. Previous
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railway
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tracks
are expired
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now
,
therefore
, large
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money
spending is
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important
for
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new
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lines
. As an example, we can
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see
first
world
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countries
are focusing on
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new
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railway
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tracks
and underground
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railway
projects, which are beneficial for
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public
transportation without ant disturbance.

In conclusion
,
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old
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lines
are useless
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now
and no need of
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money
for such projects.
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New
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railway
paths
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must
be created
and more
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money
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must
be
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fixed
for such plans.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay TPO-05 - Independent Writing Task People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do. Use specific reasons and examples to suppor v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
329 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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