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The speakers discuss two possible solutions to the woman's problem. Briefly describe the problem. Then state which solution you prefer and explain why. v.4

The speakers discuss two possible solutions to the woman's problem. Briefly describe the problem. Then state which solution you prefer and explain why. v. 4
It is true that the world has become a global village and the countries are more similar then ever before, while this has several disadvantages to local culture, I believe that overall the benefits are more significant. Admittedly, the culture is diminishing due to this development. The kids and teenagers ate more attracted towards Western fashion the more they adopting another civilization there own civilization is vanishing. To illustrate this, during the last decade, it is often seen that the cultural dress is only wearing on festivals some even do not wear it on the festivals also. However, on the other hand, there are several advantages which can be put forward to support this development. The two biggest advantages, according to me are: Firstly, the more chances of buying products of other countries means more understanding of civilization and more united-ness of the earth, hence there would be less conflicts in the name of race and colour. When everybody gets a chance to use same things the sense of equal-ness is adopted. For example, when Turkey adopted the western style they got more familiar and friendly to each other. Secondly, this development saved a huge amount of recourses and lives also. The same medicine and machines are available everywhere in the earth. So, no need to travel for operations and medical treatments. To exemplify this, in Pakistan many cancer patients have been saved ever since imported chemotherapy medicines are available. In conclusion, although the growth of the world into a global village has a few drawbacks, it is more likely to have enormous impacts on people and resources.
It is true that the world has become a global village and the countries are more similar
then
ever
before
, while this has several disadvantages to local culture, I believe that
overall
the benefits are more significant.

Admittedly
, the culture is diminishing due to this development. The kids and
teenagers
ate more attracted towards Western fashion the more
they adopting
another civilization there
own
civilization is vanishing. To illustrate this, during the last decade, it is
often
seen
that the cultural dress is
only
wearing on festivals
some
even do not wear it on the festivals
also
.

However
,
on the other hand
, there are several advantages which can
be put
forward to support this development. The two biggest advantages, according to me are:
Firstly
, the more chances of buying products of other countries means more understanding of civilization and more
united-ness
of the earth,
hence
there would be
less
conflicts in the name of race and
colour
.
When
everybody
gets
a chance to
use
same things the sense of
equal-ness
is adopted
.
For example
, when Turkey adopted the western style they
got
more familiar and friendly to each other.
Secondly
, this development saved a huge amount of recourses and
lives
also
. The same medicine and machines are available everywhere in the earth.
So
, no need to travel for operations and medical treatments. To exemplify this, in Pakistan
many
cancer patients have
been saved
ever since imported chemotherapy medicines are available.

In conclusion
, although the growth of the world into a global village has a few drawbacks, it is more likely to have enormous impacts on
people
and resources.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay The speakers discuss two possible solutions to the woman's problem. Briefly describe the problem. Then state which solution you prefer and explain why. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
268 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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