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Tourism is encouraged in many countries. Does tourism bring more advantages or disadvantages to a country. v.3

Tourism is encouraged in many countries. Does tourism bring more advantages or disadvantages to a country. v. 3
It is a fact that Travelling abroad has already become a popular and huge industry these days, and many towns and cities have taken the benefits of it. Some people worry that the activity might have a negative effect on the local communities. The following essay will discuss advantages and disadvantages of touring internationally. But, I believe that it has more benefits than the drawbacks. Many people still believe that travelling abroad for leisure activities would bring a lot of benefits for the destination places. It creates a lot of job opportunities for the local people as some of them could become tour guides or can run small businesses. When foreign travellers come to a country, they will spend their money for various activities. It means that they will bring revenue to the local government in the form of tax. The government would have enough budgets for maintaining the public facilities around the places and the local environment as well. It attracts investors in building resorts and hotels in the surrounding areas. The development of these places will absorb many employments not only from the local area, but from other cities and countries as well. Despite its negative effects, I personally believe that global tourism industries would bring more benefits to the local inhabitants and communities. It boosts the economic condition of the country and creates job opportunities for the local people. As for the negative effects, it really depends on how the government would make clear regulations and implement them.
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many
towns and cities have taken the
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benefits
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Some
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people
worry that the activity might have a
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negative
effect on the
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local
communities. The following essay will discuss advantages and disadvantages of touring
internationally
.
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But
, I believe that it has more
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benefits
than the drawbacks.

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Many
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people
still
believe that travelling abroad for leisure activities would bring
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a lot of
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benefits
for the destination places. It creates
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a lot of
job opportunities for the
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local
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people
as
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some
of them could become tour guides or can run
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small
businesses. When foreign
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travellers
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come
to a country, they will spend their money for various activities. It means that they will bring revenue to the
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local
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government
in the form of tax. The
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government
would have
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enough
budgets for maintaining the public facilities around the places and the
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local
environment
as well
. It attracts investors in building resorts and hotels in the surrounding areas. The development of these places will absorb
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many
employments not
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only
from the
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local
area,
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but
from other cities and countries
as well
.

Despite its
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negative
effects, I
personally
believe that global tourism industries would bring more
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benefits
to the
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local
inhabitants and communities. It boosts the economic condition of the country and creates job opportunities for the
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local
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people
. As for the
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negative
effects, it
really
depends on how the
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government
would
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make
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clear
regulations and implement them.
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IELTS essay Tourism is encouraged in many countries. Does tourism bring more advantages or disadvantages to a country. v. 3

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
251 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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