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Many doctors say that people in today’s world do not do enough exercise. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions are to this problem? v.1

Many doctors say that people in today’s world do not do enough exercise. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions are to this problem? v. 1
Physical training is one of the most beneficial activities to people. It has been noticed that individuals do not involve in enough fitness exercises. This essay will further discuss the lack of time and individual’s economic status as main causes of this phenomenon, then it will introduce both of designated work out sessions and raising awareness as applicable solutions to mitigate this issue. To begin with, people’s busy lifestyle negatively affects their health; they could not allot a specific weekly schedule to fitness sessions. To illustrate, the average of working hours in developed countries, such as the United State, is about 8 hours per day which affects citizens’ daily routine. This prevents them to do a wide variety of activities. In addition to that, the economic recession is an obvious contributing factor in canceling a myriad number of gem memberships. That is to say, individuals might choose to save these fees to meet their needs due to prices increasing all over the world. Consequently, tight schedules and citizens’ economic situations negatively affect people’s activities in daily basis which make them disregard physical exercises. On the other hand, two possible measures can be taken to resolve this increasing issue. First, regular physical classes could assist people to enhance their physical skills. To clarify, strike to a regular training plan positively motivates them to attend keep-to-fit classes and maintain their health. Second, government should intervene to raise its citizens’ awareness about advantageous influences of practicing exercises. This likely attracts individual’s attention to the importance of these activities. For example, many affluent countries, such as the Netherlands, provide its people with an adequate health information and public facilities, namely cycle lanes and clubs to encourage them doing exercises. Hence, if all the above measures were taken, the troubles would be by no means insurmountable. In conclusion, having analyzed people’s ignorance of doing enough physical exercises, it can be supposed that their tight schedules and economic conditions are the culpable causes. However, planning weekly gem sessions and improving people awareness could motivate them to do enough physical activities and alleviate this trouble.
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Physical
training is one of the most beneficial
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activities
to
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people
. It has
been noticed
that
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individuals
do not involve in
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enough
fitness
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exercises
. This essay will
further
discuss the lack of time and
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individual’s
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economic
status as main causes of this phenomenon, then it will introduce both of designated work out sessions and raising awareness as applicable solutions to mitigate this issue.

To
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begin
with,
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people’s
busy lifestyle
negatively
affects their health; they could not allot a specific weekly schedule to fitness sessions. To illustrate, the average of working hours in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
developed countries
, such as the United State, is about 8 hours per day which affects citizens’ daily routine. This
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevents
them to do a wide variety of
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activities
.
In addition
to that, the
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economic
recession is an obvious contributing factor in canceling a myriad number of gem memberships.
That is
to say,
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individuals
might choose to save these fees to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
their needs due to prices increasing all over the world.
Consequently
, tight schedules and citizens’
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economic
situations
negatively
affect
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people’s
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activities
in daily basis which
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make
them disregard
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physical
exercises.

On the other hand
, two possible measures can
be taken
to resolve this increasing issue.
First
, regular
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physical
classes could assist
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people
to enhance their
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physical
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
. To clarify, strike to a regular training plan
positively
motivates them to attend
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keep
-to-fit classes and maintain their health. Second,
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government
should intervene to raise its citizens’ awareness about advantageous influences of practicing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
exercises
. This likely attracts
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
individual’s
attention to the importance of these
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activities
.
For example
,
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many
affluent countries, such as the Netherlands, provide its
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people
with an adequate health information and public facilities,
namely
cycle lanes and clubs to encourage them doing
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exercises
.
Hence
, if all the above measures
were taken
, the troubles would be by no means insurmountable.

In conclusion
, having analyzed
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people’s
ignorance of doing
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
physical
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exercises
, it can
be supposed
that their tight schedules and
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economic
conditions are the culpable causes.
However
, planning weekly gem sessions and improving
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people
awareness could motivate them to do
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
physical
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
activities
and alleviate this trouble.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Many doctors say that people in today’s world do not do enough exercise. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions are to this problem? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
348 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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