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Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and includes any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. v.8

Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. v. 8
It is known that children are like dry-wax and should properly cast to become a better person in society. Some people argue that studying at home provides the best development for a child while others believe that, to have better literacy, the child should send to schools. In general, children should have the chance of studying both at home and school to become superior among others; nonetheless, I believe that schools provide a more structured approach; hence, everyone should go to school. Undoubtedly, learning at home will be more comfortable and enable a personalised environment for children. Learning at home allows them to concentrate on their own pace, allowing them to grasp more subject matter. Besides, the individual attention of parents or private tutor is valuable. Moreover, it is their nature to addict to bad habits through different kind of people due to the exposure to many social backgrounds. Nevertheless, schools provide not only the subject matter but also many life skills where a student should possess as a successful citizen in the future. No doubt that the children who attend school have better discipline. At school, they have the chance of gaining skills such as teamwork and decision making, which assist them to be an affluent national. Furthermore, the teachers at educational institutions are highly qualified and trained. As a result of this, the children are taught in a methodical way such that allowing the student to grasp the subject matter. In addition to that, the school creates a highly competitive environment, and as a result, students are keen to learn and compete with each other making better results during examinations. In conclusion, the children should have the options of studying at home as well as schools, and I firmly believe that schools provide better skills and subject matter, creating good competition among them.
It
is known
that
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children
are like dry-wax and should
properly
cast to become a
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better
person in society.
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Some
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people
argue that studying at home
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provides
the best development for a child while others believe that, to have
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better
literacy, the child should
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send
to
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schools
.
In general
,
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children
should have the chance of studying both at home and
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school
to become superior among others; nonetheless, I believe that
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schools
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provide
a more structured approach;
hence
, everyone should go to school.

Undoubtedly
, learning at home will be more comfortable and enable a
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personalised
environment for
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children
. Learning at home
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allows
them to concentrate on their
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own
pace, allowing them to grasp more
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subject
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matter
.
Besides
, the individual attention of parents or private tutor is valuable.
Moreover
, it is their nature to addict to
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bad
habits through
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different
kind of
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people
due to the exposure to
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many
social backgrounds.

Nevertheless
,
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schools
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provide
not
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only
the
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subject
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matter
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but
also
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many
life
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skills
where a student should possess as a successful citizen in the future. No doubt that the
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children
who attend
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school
have
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better
discipline. At
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school
, they have the chance of gaining
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skills
such as teamwork and
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decision making
, which assist them to be an affluent national.

Furthermore
, the teachers at educational institutions are
highly
qualified and trained.
As a result
of this, the
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children
are taught
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in a methodical way
such that allowing the student to grasp the
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subject
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matter
.
In addition
to that, the
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school
creates a
highly
competitive environment, and
as a result
, students are keen to learn and compete with each other making
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better
results during examinations.

In conclusion
, the
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children
should have the options of studying at home
as well
as
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schools
, and I
firmly
believe that
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schools
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provide
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better
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skills
and
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subject
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matter
, creating
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good
competition among them.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. v. 8

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
305 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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