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Tourism is encouraged in many countries. Does tourism bring more advantages or disadvantages to a country. v.1

Tourism is encouraged in many countries. Does tourism bring more advantages or disadvantages to a country. v. 1
I feel that tourism has more advantages than disadvantages for any country. Tourism is an industry that contributes to the economy of a country. It not only brings foreign exchange to a country but also creates awareness about the culture of a region. There are several countries that spend money on advertising and marketing because they have realized the importance of creating a new source of income. Nations like Thailand, Mauritius and Bali are highly dependent on tourism and are tourist friendly nations as well. There are many advantages to encouraging tourism in a country. It can help a nation open new streams of income. The hospitality industry, the transport industry and commodities market are some sections in the society that will benefit immensely. The locals will find new opportunities for employment and will also be able to exchange culture with visitors from other nations. Tourism will also help educate visitors from other countries about the local heritage and history. The disadvantages of encouraging tourism in a country can be unchecked immigration, illegal trading of goods and services and the increase in crime rate against foreigners. All of these limitations can be dealt with effectively if the government makes tourism development a part of their plan and standardizes certain processes. Educating the locals and building effective transport systems within and outside a city can help combat crime rates against tourists. If tourism is regulated well within a country, it can help in the progress of a nation and its citizens.
I feel that
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tourism
has more advantages than disadvantages for any
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country
.
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Tourism
is an industry that contributes to the economy of a
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country
. It not
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only
brings foreign exchange to a
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country
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but
also
creates awareness about the culture of a region. There are several
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countries
that spend money on advertising and marketing
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because
they have realized the importance of creating a new source of income.

Nations like Thailand, Mauritius and Bali are
highly
dependent on
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tourism
and are tourist friendly
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nations
as well
. There are
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many
advantages to encouraging
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tourism
in a
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country
. It can
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help
a
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nation
open new streams of income. The hospitality industry, the transport industry and commodities market are
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some
sections in the society that will benefit
immensely
.

The locals will find new opportunities for employment and will
also
be able to exchange culture with visitors from other
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nations
.
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Tourism
will
also
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help
educate visitors from other
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countries
about the local heritage and history. The disadvantages of encouraging
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tourism
in a
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country
can
be unchecked
immigration, illegal trading of
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goods
and services and the increase in crime rate against foreigners.

All of these limitations can
be dealt
with
effectively
if the
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government
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makes
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tourism
development a part of their plan and standardizes certain processes. Educating the locals and building effective transport systems within and outside a city can
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help
combat crime rates against tourists. If
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tourism
is regulated
well within a
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country
, it can
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help
in the progress of a
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nation
and its citizens.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay Tourism is encouraged in many countries. Does tourism bring more advantages or disadvantages to a country. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
250 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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