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Topic: Some people believe online reading material should be used for a child to learn to read whereas others believe only printed materials should be used. Discuss both views and give your opinion? v.1

Topic: Some people believe online reading material should be used for a child to learn to read whereas others believe only printed materials should be used. v. 1
Although, people have different thoughts that e-learning material is convenient for teenagers to study, while few things only paper-based material is sufficient for a junior. In my opinion, I considered that hard-copy material would develop a scholar's cognitive, lateral and comprehensive skills. Printout is a supplement to enhance children's self-studies. In fact, these are an immense source of knowledge; for academic students, incorporation of pictures, diagrams, and graphs helps in guided learning. This material is a vital factor to assimilate knowledge. In 2012 a researcher at Indiana University showed that reading from a hard copy allows better concentration rather than the digital one. Additionally, paper-led material encourages the child to read a lot, and likewise it would increase understanding and rote learning power. Recent data published shows that school students have more capability to organize their goal in marshal facts then university students which rely on soft copies. Thus, hard copies enhance self-confidence, autonomous learning and data gathering expertise of a student. In contrast, the effect of e-Learning material has had innumerable issues with children's health. These computers and electronic devices emit harmful radiation, which leads to loss of vision and headaches. Although the ebooks are convenient, flexible and cost-effective, they are more time-consuming than traditional printouts. A recent inspection shows that youngsters who do self learning through soft copies will take more time to understand the absence of traditional books. Moreover, these internet-based materials require time management skills and also create a sense of isolation for a student. For example, a 2013 research from Cambridge University shows that 62% of e-books learners fail to complete the task on a timeline and also suffer from mental depression. In conclusion, while people may vary in their opinions, I think it would be better students ought to prefer a traditional material as it strengthens self investigation skills and shifts information. In spite of several devastating limitations of computer-based material.
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skills
.

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students
, incorporation of pictures, diagrams, and graphs
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helps
in guided
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learning
. This
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material
is a vital factor to assimilate knowledge. In 2012 a researcher at Indiana University
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showed
that reading from a
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hard
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copy
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allows
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material
encourages the child to read a lot, and
likewise
it would increase understanding and rote
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learning
power. Recent data published
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shows
that school
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students
have more capability to organize their goal in marshal facts then university
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students
which rely on soft
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copies
.
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,
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hard
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copies
enhance self-confidence, autonomous
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learning
and data gathering expertise of a student.

In contrast
, the effect of e-Learning
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material
has had innumerable issues with children's health. These computers and electronic devices emit harmful radiation, which leads to loss of vision and headaches. Although the
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ebooks
are convenient, flexible and cost-effective, they are more time-consuming than traditional printouts. A recent inspection
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shows
that youngsters who do self
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learning
through soft
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copies
will take more time to understand the absence of traditional books.
Moreover
, these internet-based
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materials
require time management
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skills
and
also
create a sense of isolation for a
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student
.
For example
, a 2013 research from Cambridge University
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shows
that 62% of e-books learners fail to complete the task on a timeline and
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suffer from mental depression.

In conclusion
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may vary in their opinions, I
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think
it would be better
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students
ought to prefer a traditional
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material
as it strengthens self investigation
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skills
and shifts information.
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In spite of
several devastating limitations of computer-based
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material
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
Change your language and you change your thoughts.
Karl Albrecht

IELTS essay Topic: Some people believe online reading material should be used for a child to learn to read whereas others believe only printed materials should be used. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
317 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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