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Some people believe online reading materials should only be used for a child to learn to read, whereas others believe only printed materials should be used. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.4

Some people believe online reading materials should only be used for a child to learn to read, whereas others believe only printed materials should be used. v. 4
Online tool for reading is believed that is a good way for child, on the other hand, paper textbook is believed by other people that prefer than online. In my opinion, using online tools is preferable for children. However, teachers and parents should take care what child use for it. I have two reasons that tend to agree that using online tools is preferable than paper textbook. Firstly, the children do not need to carry a heavy bag every time when they go to school. It may be getting tired of child. Especially, if the child belongs to a club, it might be accelerated. When I was student, I have been carried three kilograms school bag every day, it must have been exhausted. Even though, the textbooks were used few pages each subject. Secondly, the child could search on the internet that they do not understand immediately. Some children, it is difficult to question to teacher, because of shyness or anxiety. At that time, the internet could search quickly, easy and detailed information. The children would not need to bring big and heavy textbooks. On the other hand, the children use the internet should be careful. It is, a teacher and parents have to pay attention what they use. For example, in school case, the teachers have to organize about a site what the children can see and have not to allow to use games. The parents also have to notice how long a child use it. In conclusion, using the online tool for studying is useful and handy for children. But the child cannot organize properly by themselves. Therefore, a teacher and parents have to take care them, then, the children could be used effectively.
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. In my opinion, using
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tools
is preferable for
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children
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teachers
and
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parents
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agree
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preferable
than paper textbook.
Firstly
, the
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children
do not need to carry a heavy bag every time when they go to school. It may be getting tired of
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child
.
Especially
, if the
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child
belongs to a club, it might
be accelerated
. When I was student, I have
been carried
three kilograms school bag every day, it
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must
have
been exhausted
.
Even though
, the textbooks were
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used
few pages each subject.
Secondly
, the
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child
could search on the internet that they do not understand immediately.
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Some
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children
, it is difficult to question to
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teacher
,
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because
of shyness or anxiety. At that time, the internet could search
quickly
, easy and detailed information. The
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children
would not need to bring
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big
and heavy textbooks.

On the other hand
, the
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children
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use
the internet should be careful. It is, a
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teacher
and
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parents
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have to
pay attention what they
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use
.
For example
, in school case, the
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teachers
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have to
organize about a site what the
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children
can
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see
and have not to
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allow
to
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use
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parents
also
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notice how long a
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child
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use
it.

In conclusion
, using the
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online
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tool
for studying is useful and handy for
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children
.
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But
the
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child
cannot organize
properly
by themselves.
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teacher
and
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have to
take care them, then, the
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children
could be
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used
effectively
.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people believe online reading materials should only be used for a child to learn to read, whereas others believe only printed materials should be used. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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