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Some people believe online reading materials should only be used for a child to learn to read, whereas others believe only printed materials should be used. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.3

Some people believe online reading materials should only be used for a child to learn to read, whereas others believe only printed materials should be used. v. 3
Nowadays, plenty of materials available for education. People can read the online or on paper. This essay will discuss both points of views and give relevant examples. On the one hand, online reading materials are wide spread all over the world because at the present time most countries have access to the Internet. Moreover pupils able to get more information from different sources for free and without limits. For example, such resources as Wikipedia, YouTube and Facebook contain a vast amount of necessary information and educational materials. Simultaneously people can read the articles and find out answers to many questions. In the last decades, cost of books increased radically. Editions try to improve the quality of paper, so they start to cut down more trees. This situation has a bad influence to our environment. Therefore people should try to decline printed materials and use online versions. On the other hand, sitting in front of computer for a long time has a negative effect to people’s health. It causes such problems as eye-disease, back pain and headache. While paper reading does not have such sideline activity. In modern books publishing houses use only tested fronts. In addition, familiar methods of learning are more effective. For instance, official web-site of Oxford university published a research, where they interviewed students about preferable methods of education. Results showed that 89% of student understand materials from paper better than online. In conclusion, while the advantages of technology, particularly online reading, allows to students to tap into limitless sources of information, some still prefer to learn with printed materials. In my opinion, the best way for education is combine studying online and using textbooks.
Nowadays,
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materials
available for education.
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People
can read the
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online
or on paper. This essay will discuss both points of views and give relevant examples.

On the one hand,
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online
reading
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materials
are wide spread all over the world
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because
at the present time most countries have access to the Internet.
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Moreover
pupils able to
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get
more information from
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different
sources for free and without limits.
For example
, such resources as Wikipedia, YouTube and Facebook contain a vast amount of necessary information and educational
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materials
.
Simultaneously
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people
can read the articles and find out answers to
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many
questions. In the last decades, cost of books increased
radically
. Editions try to
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improve
the quality of paper,
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so
they
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start
to
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cut
down more trees. This situation has a
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bad
influence to our environment.
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Therefore
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people
should try to decline printed
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materials
and
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use
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online
versions.

On the other hand
, sitting in front of computer for a long time has a
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negative
effect to
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people’s
health. It causes such problems as eye-disease, back pain and headache.
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While
paper reading does not have such sideline activity. In modern books publishing
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use
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only
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tested
fronts.
In addition
, familiar methods of learning are more effective.
For instance
, official web-site of Oxford university published a research, where they interviewed students about preferable methods of education. Results
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showed
that 89% of student understand
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materials
from paper better than online.

In conclusion
, while the advantages of technology,
particularly
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online
reading,
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allows
to students to tap into limitless sources of information,
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some
still
prefer to learn with printed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
materials
. In my opinion, the best way for education is combine studying
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
and using textbooks.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe online reading materials should only be used for a child to learn to read, whereas others believe only printed materials should be used. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
278 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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