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TOPIC: School children are becoming far too dependent on computers. This is having an alarming effect on reading and writing skills. Teachers need to avoid using computers in the classroom at all costs and go back to teaching basic study skills. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

TOPIC: School children are becoming far too dependent on computers. This is having an alarming effect on reading and writing skills. Teachers need to avoid using computers in the classroom at all costs and go back to teaching basic study skills. v. 1
Technology has come to be more often presented in any human life, because of that children's starts to be addicted moreover. Education programs should avoid overuse of any machines in the classroom and learn the children's handwriting and how to read from a book's. I fully agree that teaching approach need to have a more old-fashioned approach, rather computers. Let us take a look what computers bring to the education program. Firstly, all modern technology makes teaching more easier and more interesting than old black boards and projectors. As an example, different type of dynamic and interactive presentations which include better interaction between children and educator. On the other hand, thus leading to the new problem that children loosing touch for paper writing. In addition, traditional learning programs in the classrooms help children to learn different doctrines what can benefit them in the future life. Research results showing us that reading paper books instead on the electronic ones increase brain receptors and knowledge taken up on that way stays longer in our head. Apart from that learning without modern technologies increase human interaction what can't be transferred from computers how are do not have feelings. Weighing up both sides of the argument bring to us to think about the consequences of the child's addiction oof the different modern technology. Looking on all pros and cons, how they affect learning and teaching in the schools, we can be afraid of loosing traditional handwriting knowledge. This all having to lead to deeper problems in the education system in the near future, because I am supporting less computers in the classrooms and increase learning basic skills.
Technology
has
come
to be more
often
presented in any human life,
because
of that children's
starts
to
be addicted
moreover
. Education programs should avoid overuse of any machines in the classroom and learn the children's handwriting and how to read from a book's. I
fully
agree
that teaching approach need to have a more
old
-fashioned approach,
rather
computers.

Let
us take a look what computers bring to the education program.
Firstly
, all modern
technology
makes
teaching
more easier
and more interesting than
old
black boards and projectors. As an example,
different
type of dynamic and interactive presentations which include better interaction between children and educator.
On the other hand
,
thus
leading to the new problem that children loosing touch for paper writing.

In addition
, traditional
learning
programs in the classrooms
help
children to learn
different
doctrines what can benefit them in the future life. Research results showing us that reading paper books
instead
on the electronic ones increase brain receptors and knowledge taken up on that way stays longer in our head. Apart from that
learning
without modern
technologies
increase human interaction what can't
be transferred
from computers how are
do
not have feelings.

Weighing up both sides of the argument bring to us to
think
about the consequences of the child's addiction
oof
the
different
modern
technology
. Looking on all pros and cons, how they affect
learning
and teaching in the schools, we can be afraid of loosing traditional handwriting knowledge. This all having to lead to deeper problems in the education system in the near future,
because
I am supporting
less
computers in the classrooms and increase
learning
basic
skills
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay TOPIC: School children are becoming far too dependent on computers. This is having an alarming effect on reading and writing skills. Teachers need to avoid using computers in the classroom at all costs and go back to teaching basic study skills. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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