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Topic: Nowadays, there is a trend that reports of media focus on problems and emergencies rather than positive developments. Some people think it is harmful to individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree? There is an increasingly growi v.2

Topic: Nowadays, there is a trend that reports of media focus on problems and emergencies rather than positive developments. Some people think it is harmful to individuals and society. There is an increasingly growi v. 2
On the one hand, there is always a crying need for help as a result of misfortunes happening around the world. Media serve the cause of spreading the news of these to the general public. By doing this, publicity of bad news will increase the chance of alleviating the conditions of the needy for the more people in the know of the news, the more money would be devoted to the cause. For example, without the headlining of the tropical flooding in parts of Asian, the public would hardly aware of the disaster and thus it would be unlikely to help. Another function of media is to educate readers. This is why immoral conduct or inhumane acts always make headlines in most newspapers. Such publicities will bring about criticism, both constructive and unconstructive, with a view to correct those wrongdoers. On the other hand, this trend in news reports is likely to cause negative effects on people, especially those impressionable or susceptible to mental illnesses. Gloomy coverage leads to the atmosphere of distrust and unduly vigilance for people are usually exposed to the negative happenings around them. For children, in particular, who have not yet developed the capability of sifting right from wrong, any negative report may influence their actions. For example, if their sports star was exposed for his drug abuses, there is more chance that the children will emulate his behavior. In conclusion, there are potential advantages and disadvantages this development in media may bring. Hapless people may be people who benefit most while children are the ones who have to suffer.
On the one hand, there is always a crying need for
help
as a result
of misfortunes happening around the world. Media serve the cause of spreading the
news
of these to the
general public
. By doing this, publicity of
bad
news
will increase the chance of alleviating the conditions of the needy for the more
people
in the know of the
news
, the more money would
be devoted
to the cause.
For example
, without the headlining of the tropical flooding in parts of Asian, the public would hardly aware of the disaster and
thus
it would be unlikely to
help
. Another function of media is to educate readers. This is why immoral conduct or inhumane acts always
make
headlines in most newspapers. Such
publicities
will bring about criticism, both constructive and unconstructive, with a view to correct those wrongdoers.

On the other hand
, this trend in
news
reports is likely to cause
negative
effects on
people
,
especially
those impressionable or susceptible to mental illnesses. Gloomy coverage leads to the atmosphere of distrust and
unduly
vigilance for
people
are
usually
exposed to the
negative
happenings around them. For children,
in particular
, who have not
yet
developed the capability of sifting right from
wrong
, any
negative
report may influence their actions.
For example
, if their sports star
was exposed
for his drug abuses, there is more chance that the children will emulate his behavior.

In conclusion
, there are potential advantages and disadvantages this development in media may bring. Hapless
people
may be
people
who benefit most while children are the ones who
have to
suffer.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Topic: Nowadays, there is a trend that reports of media focus on problems and emergencies rather than positive developments. Some people think it is harmful to individuals and society. There is an increasingly growi v. 2

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
264 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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