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The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. v.8

The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. v. 8
A glance at the provided graph and table reveals the figures for water usage in the world. Information in the graph displays the quantity of water used globally in each sector from 1900 to 2000 whereas the table shows data on water consumed in Brazil and Congo in 2000. Overall, the water demand for agriculture, industrial, and domestic fields rose significantly during the period shown. Moreover, from the table, the consumption of water in Brazil was dwarfed by the one in Congo in 2000. In 1900, the water usage from agriculture ranked first with nearly 500 km following by industrial and domestic sectors with a similar figure (nearly 100 km). Then, the figure for agriculture increased rapidly by over 500 km, while the data on industrial use and domestic use saw modest growth and shared a comparable figure. Nevertheless, ultimately, the figure for industrial use increased more rapidly than the one for domestic use and reached its maximum threshold at over 1000 km. Furthermore, the peak of was about three times as high as that of industrial field. In 2000, the residents of Brazil and Congo were 176 million and 5. 2 million, respectively. Besides, irrigated land in Brazil, with 26, 500 km, also much higher than that in Congo. In comparison to water consumption for each, therefore, the figure for Brazil was more than.
A glance at the provided graph and table reveals the
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figures
for
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water
usage in the world. Information in the graph displays the quantity of
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water
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used
globally in each sector from 1900 to 2000 whereas the table
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shows
data on
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water
consumed in Brazil and Congo in 2000.

Overall
, the
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water
demand for agriculture,
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industrial
, and
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domestic
fields rose
significantly
during the period shown.
Moreover
, from the table, the consumption of
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water
in Brazil
was dwarfed
by the one in Congo in 2000.

In 1900, the
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water
usage from agriculture ranked
first
with
nearly
500 km following by
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industrial
and
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domestic
sectors with a similar
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figure
(
nearly
100 km). Then, the
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figure
for agriculture increased
rapidly
by over 500 km, while the data on
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industrial
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use
and
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domestic
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use
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saw
modest growth and shared a comparable
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figure
.
Nevertheless
,
ultimately
, the
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figure
for
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industrial
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use
increased more
rapidly
than the one for
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domestic
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use
and reached its maximum threshold at over 1000 km.
Furthermore
, the peak of was about three times as high as that of
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industrial
field.

In 2000, the residents of Brazil and Congo were 176 million and 5. 2 million,
respectively
.
Besides
, irrigated land in Brazil, with 26, 500 km,
also
much higher than that in Congo.
In comparison
to
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water
consumption for each,
therefore
, the
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figure
for Brazil was more than.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
225 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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