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Topic: In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. why is this the case? What can be done about this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experien v.1

Topic: In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. why is this the case? What can be done about this problem? 1
Few categories of people say that modernization such as electronic books will completely take over the conventional daily and periodicals. I certainly agree up to seventy five percent, this essay narrates both the aspects of this improvement. Improvement in technology has brought a great amount of change in reading habits, such as online readings on smart phones and computers has inculcated the habit of making information available in seconds. This has impacted a lot on mind of human beings, almost everyone has started utilizing this change. Usage of modern technology has equipped with great convenience. In case of paper-based media, one has to personally go to shop to buy it or ask the delivery boy to deliver to ones’ home. Such middleman is removed completely by technology, moment publisher publishes the write-up, it is available for reading on devices. For example, timesofindia. com is the best website which gets news to readers at every moment. Although technology has made life easy, the joy of holding the paper in hand and writing on it to take notes is paramount. The smell of fresh paper and ink gives mesmerizing effect. One can turn the pages and explore the news. For example, people wait for daily newspapers in the morning, to feel the fun of reading paper based medium. Moreover, local advertisers use such dailies to advertise their products. To sum up, technological improvement in reading media has captured the market to its maximum levels, but still there are a few who prefer to have a hand held medium such as magazines and newspapers.
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say that modernization such as electronic books will completely take over the conventional daily and periodicals. I
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agree
up to
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seventy five
percent, this essay narrates both the aspects of this improvement.

Improvement in
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technology
has brought a great amount of
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change
in
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reading
habits, such as online
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readings
on smart phones and computers has inculcated the habit of making information available in seconds. This has impacted a lot on mind of human beings, almost everyone has
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started
utilizing this
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change
. Usage of modern
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technology
has equipped with great convenience. In case of paper-based media, one
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has to
personally
go to shop to
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buy
it or ask the delivery boy to deliver to ones’ home. Such middleman
is removed
completely by
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technology
, moment publisher publishes the write-up, it is available for
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reading
on devices.
For example
,
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timesofindia
.
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com
is the best website which
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gets
news to readers at every moment.

Although
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technology
has made life easy, the joy of holding the paper in hand and writing on it to take notes is paramount. The smell of fresh paper and ink gives mesmerizing effect. One can turn the pages and explore the news.
For example
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
wait for daily newspapers in the morning, to feel the fun of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reading
paper based medium.
Moreover
, local advertisers
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
such dailies to advertise their products.

To sum up, technological improvement in
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reading
media has captured the market to its maximum levels,
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but
still
there are a few who prefer to have a hand held medium such as magazines and newspapers.
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IELTS essay Topic: In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. why is this the case? What can be done about this problem? 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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