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Would you prefer to go to the opera or to a football game? Use reasons and detailsto support response. v.1

Would you prefer to go to the opera or to a football game? Use reasons and detailsto support response. v. 1
The topic of vertical cities or horizontal cities is still debatable. While a lot of people believe that it is better to live and work in horizontal cities, a couple of believe to live in vertical cities. I also fall in the majority who believe in horizontal cities. Both of them have their own advantages and disadvantages. In the vertical cities, large population lives in small area of land which means, you can approach or avail any facilities with no impediments. You can reach hospitals, police, schools, and market in no time. Hence, saves your precious time which you can utilize somewhere else. You can meet your friends and relatives in no time. Although it has advantages and makes people's life easier, it brings chaos in future. For example, the pollution produces by vehicles will be inside the city and people of the city will inhale it every day and become sick. This also increase global-warming as no trees nearby to absorb it. This has been observed in decades that more population brings disaster on that land. On the other hand, horizontal cities distribute the population across, consequently, you will see lots of trees around individual houses which will absorb the pollution created by people and it get's distributed. Hence, less pollution, global-warming, and healthy life. Having increases pollution is dangerous for not only people, but also trees and animals. The best way to live life is to live in peace and harmony with nature. To conclude, although vertical cities make people's life easy easier, horizontal cities are better for both people and nature. People should try making horizontal cities rather vertical cities.
The topic of
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cities
or horizontal
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cities
is
still
debatable. While
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a lot of
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people
believe that it is better to
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live
and work in horizontal
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cities
, a couple of believe to
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live
in
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vertical
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cities
. I
also
fall in the majority who believe in horizontal
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cities
. Both of them have their
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own
advantages and disadvantages.

In the
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vertical
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cities
, large population
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lives
in
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small
area of land which means, you can approach or avail any facilities with no impediments. You can reach hospitals, police, schools, and market in no time.
Hence
, saves your precious time which you can utilize somewhere else. You can
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meet
your friends and relatives in no time. Although it has advantages and
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makes
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people
's
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life
easier, it brings chaos
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in future
.
For example
, the
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pollution
produces by vehicles will be inside the city and
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people
of the city will inhale it every day and become sick. This
also
increase global-warming as no trees nearby to absorb it. This has
been observed
in decades that more population brings disaster on that land.

On the other hand
, horizontal
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cities
distribute the population across,
consequently
, you will
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see
lots of trees around individual
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houses
which will absorb the
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pollution
created by
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people
and it
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distributed.
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, less
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pollution
, global-warming, and healthy
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life
. Having increases
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pollution
is
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dangerous
for not
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only
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people
,
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also
trees and animals. The best way to
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live
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life
is to
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live
in peace and harmony with nature.

To conclude
, although
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vertical
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cities
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make
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people
's
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life
easy easier, horizontal
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cities
are better for both
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people
and nature.
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should try making horizontal
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cities
rather
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vertical
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cities
.
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IELTS essay Would you prefer to go to the opera or to a football game? Use reasons and detailsto support response. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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